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You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of visit Write a letter to your friend In your letter Explain the important Apologize for the situation Suggest a new arrangement v.2

You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of visit Write a letter to your friend In your letter Explain the important Apologize for the situation Suggest a new arrangement v. 2
Dear John, Hope everything is fine with you and all the things are going good. As I told you about meeting you during my visit to england this month end is being postponed to mid of the next month. Due to emergency in home I stopped my journey this time. my presence is deadly important as no one is there to take care of my wife as she had minor fracture in her leg. We visited a doctor nearby and he suggested for bed rest for 2 weeks. So, I have shifted my travel period to next month. I am so sorry for the inconvenience created to you in cancelling the room booked for this month. also, I promise you that, I will definitely meet you during my next visit which I have planed in coming month. I will share you the details regarding my start date and the timing of my flight. I request you to arrange another accommodation for me at the time of my visit to england. I also intend you to plan visiting different places which are must to be seen.
Dear John,

Hope everything is fine with you and all the things are going
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
you about meeting you during my visit to
Possible spelling mistake found.
england
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
is
being postponed
to mid of the
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
. Due to emergency in home I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
my journey this time.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
my
presence is deadly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
as no one is there to take care of my wife as she had minor fracture in her leg. We visited a doctor
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
nearby and
he suggested for bed rest for 2 weeks.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I have shifted my travel period to
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
. I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
sorry for the inconvenience created to you in cancelling the room booked for this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
also
, I promise you that, I will definitely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you during my
next
visit which I have planed in coming
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
month
. I will share you the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
regarding my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
date and the timing of my flight. I request you to arrange another accommodation for me at the time of my visit to
Possible spelling mistake found.
england
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
also
intend you to plan visiting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
places which are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of visit Write a letter to your friend In your letter Explain the important Apologize for the situation Suggest a new arrangement v. 2

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
185 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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