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Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really. interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the v.2

Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really. interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the v. 2
Dear John, I have read about a computer course your company is offering and I am writing this letter to express my interest. First, let me brief you about my academic background. I have completed my bachelor’s degree in commerce; followed by Master’s in Business Administration. I had never got the chance to study computer as a course, but it’s always been very fascinating to me. I have been using computer at my home and my workplace for a good long time. I read your advertisement details about advance excel in 30 days. It seems very informative and useful to me and I would definitely like to enroll for it. The knowledge will certainly help me perform office tasks more efficiently and in smart way. However, I am afraid to inform you that I do not fulfill your criteria of having prior elementary course. As I mentioned earlier that I have not studied computer at academics level. Could I ask you for a favor to exempt the eligibility criteria in my case and register me for this course? I shall be grateful to you for this. Thanking you in anticipation. Yours Sincerely, Sam
Dear John,

I have read about a computer course your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
offering and
I am writing this letter to express my interest.
First
,
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let
me brief you about my academic background. I have completed my bachelor’s degree in commerce; followed by Master’s in Business Administration. I had never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
the chance to study computer as a course,
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but
it’s always been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
fascinating to me.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have been using computer at my home and my workplace for a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
long time.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
read your advertisement
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
about advance excel in 30 days. It seems
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
informative and useful to me and I would definitely like to enroll for it. The knowledge will
certainly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me perform office tasks more
efficiently
and in smart way.

However
, I am afraid to inform you that I do not fulfill your criteria of having prior elementary course.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
I mentioned earlier that I have not studied computer at academics level. Could I ask you for a favor to exempt the eligibility criteria in my case and register me for this course?

I shall be grateful to you for this. Thanking you in anticipation.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Sam
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really. interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
192 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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