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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: explain the reason why you decline the offerexpress your gratitudeexplain why you like your current job very muchWrite v.69

You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: explain the reason why you decline the offerexpress your gratitudeexplain why you like your current job very muchWrite v. 69
Dear Sir, I am extremely sorry to let you know that I will not join you company, which I suppose to join from 1st of August 2019. I can understand that my decision to reject you offer is not as per the spirit, as I have confirmed earlier after long discussion and salary negotiation. Actually, major reason why I was looking for a job change was to get financial boost in my career. Apart from that I have no issue with my current organization; I have no problem with colleagues and with my seniors. Moreover, office ambiance is so friendly that I feel as if I am in my second home. Last week my boss and HR have consulted with me, and suggested salary hike, slightly more than what you offered, with a promotion. Now, I will be looking after a new department of my choice. Once again, I apologize for the declination of the offer, and I hope, I am able state my reason clearly! Yours faithfully, Bibhu Kalita
Dear Sir,

I am
extremely
sorry to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, which I suppose to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
from 1st of August 2019. I can understand that my decision to reject you offer is not as per the spirit, as I have confirmed earlier after long discussion and salary negotiation.

Actually, major reason why I was looking for a job
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
was to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
financial boost in my career. Apart from that I have no issue with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
organization; I have no problem with colleagues and with my seniors.
Moreover
, office ambiance is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
friendly that I feel as if I am in my second home.

Last week my boss and HR have consulted with me, and suggested salary hike,
slightly
more than what you offered, with a promotion.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
, I will be looking after a new department of my choice.

Once again, I apologize for the declination of the offer, and I hope, I am able state my reason
clearly
!

Yours
faithfully
,

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Bibhu
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Kalita
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0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You cannot go to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to: explain the reason why you decline the offerexpress your gratitudeexplain why you like your current job very muchWrite v. 69

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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