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you can not go to a company where you got an offer. write a letter to the hr supervisor toexplain the reason why you decline the offerexpress your gratitudeexplain that you like your current job very much v.2

you can not go to a company where you got an offer. write a letter to the hr supervisor toexplain the reason why you decline the offerexpress your gratitudeexplain that you like your current job very much v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding your offer to me to join your staff. At the moment, I go to the clinic and work four hours per day from 3 p. m to 7 p. m. I use the morning time to study and go to the French class inasmuch as I have decided to immigrate to Canada. I have come to realize that you needed an employee working at your clinic every morning for at least the next six months. Thus, although I was looking forward to work for you, I have no there choice but to turn down your offer. Nevertheless, I appreciate your offer very much since not only is it flattering to get a request from your institute, but it would have been such an honor to work with the great staff you have got. To be frank, I am satisfied with my current career. It lets me make enough money as well as learning a new language. Besides, I enjoy the company of my great co-workers such as Dr. Behmanesh. I would like to keep the lines of communication open in case you were looking for a dentist to cover night shifts. Yours faithfully, Dr. Aidin Farughi
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you regarding your offer to me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
your staff.

At the moment, I go to the clinic and work four hours per day from 3 p. m to 7 p. m. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the morning time to study and go to the French
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
inasmuch as I have decided to immigrate to Canada. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to realize that you needed an employee working at your clinic every morning for at least the
next
six months.
Thus
, although I was looking forward to work for you, I have no there choice
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
to turn down your offer.

Nevertheless
, I appreciate your offer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much since not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
is it flattering to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a request from your institute,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it would have been such an honor to work with the great staff you have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
.

To be frank, I
am satisfied
with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
career. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lets
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
money
as well
as learning a new language.
Besides
, I enjoy the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
of my great co-workers such as Dr.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Behmanesh
.

I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the lines of communication open in case you were looking for a dentist to cover night shifts.

Yours
faithfully
,

Dr. Aidin
Possible spelling mistake found.
Farughi
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter you can not go to a company where you got an offer. write a letter to the hr supervisor toexplain the reason why you decline the offerexpress your gratitudeexplain that you like your current job very much v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
205 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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