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You cannot got to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to explain the reason why you decline the offer, express you gratitude, explain you like your current job very much. v.2

You cannot got to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to explain the reason why you decline the offer, express you gratitude, explain you like your current job very much. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing with regard to the agreement which I got from your company. I regret to inform you that I have decided not to be part of your team. After careful consideration I refused the offer because my current manager have given me better position and increased my salary even more than I expected. I would like to express my grateful for you and your company that you gave me the chance to introduce myself on interview. I am honoured that you have chosen my application. I am sure, that your company can give their employs plenty opportunity to develop their skills and knowledge. I have to mention that I really enjoy my current job because it gives me chance gather wide range experience as an architect. At the same time, I am able to cooperate with international companies and share my experience with other colleagues. Thank you for your time and I wish you and your company all the best. Yours faithfully
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing with regard to the agreement which I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
from your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
. I regret to inform you that I have decided not to be part of your team.

After careful consideration I refused the offer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
manager have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
me better position and increased my salary even more than I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
.

I would like to express my grateful for you and your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
that you gave me the chance to introduce myself on interview. I am
Possible spelling mistake. 'honoured' is British English.
honoured
that you have chosen my application.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am sure, that your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
can give their employs
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
opportunity to develop their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and knowledge.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
mention that I
really
enjoy my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
job
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it gives me chance gather wide range experience as an architect.

At the same time, I am able to cooperate with international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
and share my experience with other colleagues.

Thank you for your time and I wish you and your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
all the best.

Yours
faithfully
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You cannot got to a company where you got an offer. Write a letter to the HR supervisor to explain the reason why you decline the offer, express you gratitude, explain you like your current job very much. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
167 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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