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You have been working in an international company in abroad. Now you are going back to home country without informing your office friends. Write an apology letter to these friends. In the letter, you should: •apologies to your friends•explain why you ar v.2

You have been working in an international company in abroad. Now you are going back to home country without informing your office friends. Write an apology letter to these friends. In the letter, you should: •apologies to your friends•explain why you ar v. 2
Dear John, I am writing to you to let you know that I am in India from last 4 days. I understand your situation in office as I have left without informing my decision to coming back to my home. I sincerely apologize for the inconvenience faced by you since my absence. This happened all of a sudden after I got a call from my elder brother that my father was hospitalized. My father suffered from heart attack on Monday evening and my family immediately admitted him in the nearby hospital. After getting this sad news, I immediately booked my flight and came back to India. Even, I informed my manager about my situation after landing in New Delhi airport. I can vibe the situation in office, as we were about close a deal that we were chasing from last 2 years. However, I believe that you are capable enough to clear all last-minute obligations for this deal. Moreover, I am available on WhatsApp for any support, but answering a phone call will be limited. Had you been on my shoe, you would have taken the same decision. Once again my sincere apology to you and see you soon. Regards, Bibhu Kalita
Dear John,

I am writing to you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I am in India from last 4 days. I understand your situation in office as I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
without informing my decision to coming back to my home.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
sincerely
apologize for the inconvenience faced by you since my absence.

This happened all of a sudden after I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a call from my elder brother that my father
was hospitalized
. My father suffered from heart attack on Monday evening and my family immediately admitted him in the nearby hospital. After getting this sad news, I immediately booked my flight and came back to India. Even, I informed my manager about my situation after landing in New Delhi airport.

I can vibe the situation in office, as we were about close a deal that we were chasing from last 2 years.
However
, I believe that you are capable
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
all last-minute obligations for this deal.
Moreover
, I am available on WhatsApp for any support,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
answering a phone call will
be limited
. Had you been on my shoe, you would have taken the same decision.

Once again my sincere apology to you and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Regards,

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Bibhu
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Kalita
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have been working in an international company in abroad. Now you are going back to home country without informing your office friends. Write an apology letter to these friends. In the letter, you should: •apologies to your friends•explain why you ar v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
201 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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