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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: •thank them for the v.60

Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: •thank them for the v. 60
Dear Mary, Hello, how are you. Hope you are having a joyous time. I am writing this letter to thank you for the remarkable holiday which I spent with you in your country. I had a great time and I can never forget those days of fun and enjoyment. I would like to thank you for sending me the photographs. All the photos are amazing bringing back the memories of the time we were together, moreover, the fun we had doing shopping, visiting astounding beaches. I am much obliged for you to invite me to stay at you place in your home country. Singapore is a beautiful place with extraordinary landscape and beaches. The Sentosa in Singapore was one the best place with restaurants offering tempting and mouth-watering cuisines, the Disney land and the amazing rides. I apologise for writing after a long time. When I reached back home my health conditions deteriorated. I was suffering from cold, cough and sore throat. I was on strong medications and as a result I was not able return to mundane office work for a week. I would like to invite you to visit my city Delhi and stay with me for few days. The best time to come to Delhi is October and November as the weather is pleasant. We will have a lot of fun in shopping, visiting the beautiful architectural places and having succulent food especially the famous street food of Delhi. I hope to see you soon. Take care. Lots of love, Prabhpreet Kaur
Dear Mary,

Hello, how are you. Hope you are having a joyous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. I am writing this letter to thank you for the remarkable holiday which I spent with you in your country. I had a great
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
and I can never forget those days of fun and enjoyment.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to thank you for sending me the photographs. All the photos are amazing bringing back the memories of the
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time
we were together,
moreover
, the fun we had
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "going shopping".
doing shopping
, visiting astounding beaches. I am much obliged for you to invite me to stay at you
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place
in your home country. Singapore is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
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place
with extraordinary landscape and beaches. The
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Sentosa
in Singapore was
Did you mean "one of"?
one
the best
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place
with restaurants offering tempting and mouth-watering cuisines, the Disney land and the amazing rides.

I
Possible spelling mistake. 'apologise' is British English.
apologise
for writing after a long
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
“When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
I reached back home my health conditions deteriorated. I was suffering from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
, cough and sore throat. I was on strong medications and
as a result
I was not able return to mundane office work for a week.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to invite you to visit my city Delhi and stay with me for few days. The best
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to Delhi is October and November as the weather is pleasant. We will have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
fun in shopping, visiting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
architectural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
places
and having succulent food
especially
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
street food of Delhi.

I hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. Take care.

Lots of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
,

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Prabhpreet
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Kaur
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS letter Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: •thank them for the v. 60

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
254 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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