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Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. v.2

Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. v. 2
Dear Mark and Lucy, Hope you are doing great. I had a great time with you guys. Thank you so much both for the remarkable holiday in your city and for the lovely photos that you sent me yesterday. Canada is certainly a spectacular country with an extraordinary landscape, vibrant culture and wildlife, particularly up in the area where you are. The holiday is over but I will never forget the way you treated me - it was fabulous. Sorry, it has taken me so long to write back and thank you. Almost as soon as I landed back in Italy, I got extremely busy with my office work. Besides, a severe cold forced me to take a few days off from office and I struggled to regain momentum at work and at home. I would like to invite both of you to visit Italy. We will be celebrating our parent's 40th marriage anniversary next month and I expect you on this special occasion. I will take you to some of the famous places in Italy including Rome which is a historic place. Best known for housing ancient Roman structures and the Vatican City, Rome has stunning cathedrals and Renaissance architecture. I am sure you will enjoy your time here. I would love to see you both soon. Take care and write back. Warm wishes, Sofia
Dear Mark and Lucy,

Hope you are doing great. I had a great time with you guys. Thank you
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so
much both for the remarkable holiday in your city and for the lovely photos that you
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sent
me yesterday.

Canada is
certainly
a spectacular country with an extraordinary landscape, vibrant culture and wildlife,
particularly
up in the area where you are. The holiday is over
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but
I will never forget the way you treated me
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it was fabulous.

Sorry, it has taken me
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so
long to write back and thank you. Almost as
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soon
as I landed back in Italy, I
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got
extremely
busy with my office work.
Besides
, a severe
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
forced me to take a few days off from office and I struggled to regain momentum at work and at home.

I would like to invite both of you to visit Italy. We will be celebrating our parent's 40th
Wedding anniversaries are the proper term to describe the anniversary of the day of a wedding.
marriage
anniversary
next
month and I
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expect
you on this special occasion. I will take you to
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some of the
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famous
places in Italy including Rome which is a historic place. Best known for housing ancient Roman structures and the Vatican City, Rome has stunning cathedrals and Renaissance architecture. I am sure you will enjoy your time here.

I would
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love
to
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see
you both
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soon
. Take care and write back.

Warm wishes,

Sofia
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with some friends. They have just sent you some photos of your holiday. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
225 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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