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You should spend 20 minutes for this task You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter •Explain your situation •Describe your problems •Tell h v.2

You should spend 20 minutes for this task You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter •Explain your situation •Describe your problems •Tell h v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to notify you that I will not be able to start with my services in your company from nest week due to some reasons. Let me explain the same in further detail. I was issued with the offer letter form IDFC Mutual fund for the position as assistant manager and was supposed to start with my services from 20th September net week but due to sudden health issues suffered by my aunt, I will not be able to begin with my job for the date mentioned. My aunt had an asthma attack yesterday an was admitted in hospital. The doctors have advised her medication and complete bed rest, moreover she has stay away inside her house away from smoke and pollution as this will make her breathing more difficult. Since she has no one I have to care of her health for a week to ensure that she is improving. I apologise that my delay in joining the company will cause inconvenience for you. I hope you will understand my situation and will postpone my day of joining to 29th September. Looking forward to hearing from you soon, Your sincerely, Prabhpreet Kaur
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to notify you that I will not be able to
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start
with my services in your
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company
from nest week due to
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some
reasons.
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Let
me
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explain
the same in
further
detail.

I
was issued
with the offer letter form
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IDFC
Mutual fund for the position as assistant manager and
was supposed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
with my services from 20th September net week
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but
due to sudden health issues suffered by my aunt, I will not be able to
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begin
with my job for the date mentioned.

My aunt had an asthma attack yesterday
Did you mean "and" or "any"?
an
was admitted
in hospital. The doctors have advised her medication and complete bed rest,
moreover
she has stay away inside her
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house
away from smoke and pollution as this will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
her breathing more difficult. Since she has no one I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
care of her health for a week to ensure that she is improving.

I
Possible spelling mistake. 'apologise' is British English.
apologise
that my delay in joining the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
will cause inconvenience for you. I hope you will understand my situation and will postpone my day of joining to 29th September.

Looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
,

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
sincerely
,

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Prabhpreet
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Kaur
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You should spend 20 minutes for this task You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter •Explain your situation •Describe your problems •Tell h v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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