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you have ordered a new computer. Unfortunately, when it arrived you have found some of the accessories like printers, speakers and headphone sets were missing which are to be in the package. You would like the company to send them by next week. Write a le v.2

you have ordered a new computer. Unfortunately, when it arrived you have found some of the accessories like printers, speakers and headphone sets were missing which are to be in the package. You would like the company to send them by next week. Write a le v. 2
Dear Company, I was excited to purchase your product, but my experience has turned out very poor. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with your product in hopes you can help remedy the situation. I purchased a new computer, model, Dell Inspiron 10 on 31/08/2018, just three days ago. I would like to inform you that there are some items missing from the order placed. Moreover, I was surprised to see that all the other items such as printers, scanners, and headphone sets are not in the box when unpacked. I have contacted your store immediately in order to inquire about the missing accessories and spoke to the store manager. He informed me his record shows that the package was delivered with all the items which are ordered in the catalog. In addition, he suggested contacting the courier service who delivered the package. I was disappointed with the way everything was handled. While I contacted the courier service, they have informed me there was no problem from their end. Therefore, I insist your company take necessary action and send me the missing items early by next week because of which my work is hampered. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Bhavana
Dear
Company
,

I
was excited
to
purchase
your product,
but
my experience has turned out
very
poor. I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with your product in hopes you can
help
remedy the situation.

I
purchased
a new computer, model, Dell
Inspiron
10 on 31/08/2018,
just
three days ago.
I
would like to inform you that there are
some
items
missing from the order placed.
Moreover
, I
was surprised
to
see
that all the other
items
such as printers, scanners, and headphone sets are not in the box when unpacked.

I have contacted your store immediately in order to inquire about the missing accessories and spoke to the store manager. He informed me his record
shows
that the package
was delivered
with all the
items
which
are ordered
in the catalog.
In addition
, he suggested contacting the courier service who delivered the package.

I
was disappointed
with the way everything
was handled
. While I contacted the courier service, they have informed me there was no problem from their
end
.
Therefore
, I insist your
company
take necessary action and
send
me the missing
items
early by
next
week
because
of which my work
is hampered
.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Bhavana
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter you have ordered a new computer. Unfortunately, when it arrived you have found some of the accessories like printers, speakers and headphone sets were missing which are to be in the package. You would like the company to send them by next week. Write a le v. 2

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  American English
8 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
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