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Write a letter to your former teacher. In your letterExplain how you heard about his/her retirementDescribe what made him/her such a great teacherSay how your teacher affected your life. v.2

Write a letter to your former teacher. In your letterExplain how you heard about his/her retirementDescribe what made him/her such a great teacherSay how your teacher affected your life. v. 2
Dear Mr. Suresh, Hope this letter finds you with high spirits. Firstly, my hearty congratulations to you to complete 20 years of your great service as a teacher in our school. I am your student from the batch 2010 pass out as your son Kiran. Hope you remember me by now. As you know these days social media plays a vital role in spreading information rapidly around the globe. There were many photographs of your last working day in the Alumni group on Facebook. Therefore, got to know the news that you have got retired. Firstly, I am glad and lucky to be your student for ten years right from my 1st standard. Not only me but others from my class also admires you and can never forget your classes and punishments which we all loved when we were in high schools. Although I hated Physics class until you started teaching our class which turned out to be one of my favorite classes in school. Moreover, you made the subject very interesting and also very easy to achieve the highest marks. you have been just like a friend to me and also other students. I still remember my graduation day wherein every student had to talk about the teacher inspired them. Of course, I spoke about you which made you emotional and you hugged me in front of the whole school assembly. Henceforth, you being my role model in my life made me take up the same occupation as yours. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Bhavana
Dear Mr. Suresh,

Hope this letter finds you with high spirits.
Firstly
, my hearty congratulations to you to complete 20 years of your great service as a teacher in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. I am your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
from the batch 2010 pass out as your son Kiran. Hope you remember me by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
you know these days social media plays a vital role in spreading information
rapidly
around the globe. There were
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
photographs of your last working day in the Alumni group on Facebook.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
to know the news that you have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
retired.

Firstly
, I am glad and lucky to be your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
for ten years right from my 1st standard. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
others from my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
also
admires you and can never forget your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
and punishments which we all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
when we were in high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
. Although I hated Physics
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
until you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
teaching our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
which turned out to be one of my favorite
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
Moreover
, you made the subject
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
interesting and
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
easy to achieve the highest marks.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
you
have been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
like a friend to me and
also
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
. I
still
remember my graduation day wherein every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
had to talk about the teacher inspired them.
Of course
, I spoke about you which made you emotional and you hugged me in front of the whole
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
assembly. Henceforth, you being my role model in my life made me take up the same occupation as yours.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Bhavana
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter Write a letter to your former teacher. In your letterExplain how you heard about his/her retirementDescribe what made him/her such a great teacherSay how your teacher affected your life. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
258 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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