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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. v.1

You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am very grateful to you for the job opportunity as an internal auditor in your organisation - KSM Chartered Accountants. I am supposed to join on November 1st, however, I regret to inform you that I can not join on the pre-agreed date. I sincerely apologise for any inconvenience this may cause. Please let me take a moment to elaborate on why I will not be able to join your organisation on the date previously planned. Unfortunately, last week while playing football with some old friends, I severely sprained my ankle. I was rushed to the hospital immediately and took medical care for the next few days. Since my condition is critical and the doctor advised me not to walk for the next few days, it will be practically impossible for me to join your company on the stipulated date. I trust you can understand my dire circumstances. If possible, I would like to postpone my joining date by two weeks and start my work from 15th November. I hope you would allow me to join two weeks later than previously planned so that I can concentrate on my work immediately after joining your office. Looking forward to your reply. Sameed Qureshi
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am
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very
grateful to you for the job opportunity as an internal auditor in your
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organisation
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KSM Chartered Accountants. I
am supposed
to
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join
on November 1st,
however
, I regret to inform you that I can not
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join
on the pre-
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agreed
date.
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I
sincerely
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apologise
for any inconvenience this may cause.

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Please
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let
me take a moment to elaborate on why I will not be able to
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join
your
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organisation
on the date previously planned. Unfortunately, last week while playing football with
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some
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old
friends, I
severely
sprained my ankle. I
was rushed
to the hospital immediately and took medical care for the
next
few days. Since my condition is critical and the doctor advised me not to walk for the
next
few days, it will be
practically
impossible for me to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
join
your
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company
on the stipulated date.

I trust you can understand my dire circumstances. If possible, I would like to postpone my joining date by two weeks and
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start
my work from 15th November. I hope you would
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allow
me to
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join
two weeks later than previously planned
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so
that I can concentrate on my work immediately after joining your office.

Looking forward to your reply.

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Sameed
Qureshi
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. v. 1

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  American English
6 paragraphs
206 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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