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25/09/2017You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer, in your letterExplain your situationDescribe your problemsTell him when you think you can start. v.2

25/09/2017You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer, in your letterExplain your situationDescribe your problemsTell him when you think you can start. v. 2
Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to apologize for the inconvenience caused by me. Two weeks ago I had an online job interview with your representative who stated that my candidature is accepted on a position of a web-designer in your company and I need arrive in Los Angeles on 2nd March 2017 to begin my work. Unfortunately, it appears that I am not able to meet this requirement. Firstly, there are some problems with a new apartment in LA. Although I have found a suitable house for my family that is located near my new workplace, I struggle to find a decent school in the same neighborhood that will suit to my young daughter who studies at elementary school. Secondly, it seems that I contracted a severe case of flue. In fact, I have been hospitalized for a week and my doctor strictly recommended me to stay in a bed for at least two weeks in order to avoid having complications with my health. Consequently, I would like to start my work on 1st April 2017 because by this time the disease will have been completely cured and a full course of rehabilitation will have been finished as well. Moreover, my wife will be able to find a proper school for our beloved offspring as well. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk
Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to apologize for the inconvenience caused by me.

Two weeks ago I had an online job interview with your representative who stated that my candidature is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
on a position of a web-designer in your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and I need arrive in Los Angeles on 2nd March 2017 to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
my work.

Unfortunately, it appears that I am not able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
this requirement.
Firstly
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
problems with a new apartment in LA. Although I have found a suitable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
for my family that
is located
near my new workplace, I struggle to find a decent school in the same neighborhood that will suit to my young daughter who studies at elementary school.
Secondly
, it seems that I contracted a severe case of flue. In fact, I have
been hospitalized
for a week and my doctor
strictly
recommended me to stay in a bed for at least two weeks in order to avoid having complications with my health.

Consequently
, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
my work on 1st April 2017
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
by this time the disease will have been completely cured and a full course of rehabilitation will have
been finished
as well
.
Moreover
, my wife will be able to find a proper school for our beloved offspring
as well
.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
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Dubinchuk
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter 25/09/2017You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer, in your letterExplain your situationDescribe your problemsTell him when you think you can start. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
220 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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