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You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems. Explain the problemsSuggesting ways to help the situationProposing a possible meeting v.2

You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems. Explain the problemsSuggesting ways to help the situationProposing a possible meeting v. 2
Dear Neighbors, I am writing this letter to draw your attention regarding the problems which are faced by me related to common parking area. As we are sharing the parking lot since long time, we have not risen any issues. However, from past few days I am observing that Mr. Khurana is parking his car in my parking space deliberately due to which I am not able to park my car. Moreover, some lights of the parking area is not working properly, therefore, it is arduous to park car especially at night. To address these problems, I would like to give you some suggestions. Firstly, make rules and regulations that every members of society must have to park their cars in allotted area. Secondly, replace the faulty lights with new ones to resolve the problem of parking at night. I am requesting you all to organize a meeting to untangle these issues. Furthermore, it would be a great idea to arrange the meeting on the next Tuesday because there will be a public holiday and it will be suitable for everyone. I hope you will reply me at your earliest convenience. Your faithfully, Mohit Ratnu
Dear Neighbors,

I am writing this letter to draw your attention regarding the problems which
are faced
by me related to common
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
area.

As we are sharing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
lot since long time, we have not risen any issues.
However
, from past few days I am observing that Mr.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Khurana
is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
space
deliberately
due to which I am not able to park my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
lights of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
area is not working
properly
,
therefore
, it is arduous to park
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
especially
at night.

To address these problems, I would like to give you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
suggestions.
Firstly
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations that every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "member"?
members
of society
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
park their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
in allotted area.
Secondly
, replace the faulty lights with new ones to resolve the problem of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parking
at night.

I am requesting you all to organize a meeting to untangle these issues.
Furthermore
, it would be a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to arrange the meeting on the
next
Tuesday
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there will be a public holiday and it will be suitable for everyone.

I hope you will reply me at your earliest convenience.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
,

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Mohit
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Ratnu
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You share a parking area with several neighbors and have recently started having problems. Explain the problemsSuggesting ways to help the situationProposing a possible meeting v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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