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You see an advertisement for a course designed to help improve your memory. Write a letter to the organisers of the course. in lettergive some background information about yourselfexplain your own problems and why you would like to do the courseenquire ab v.2

You see an advertisement for a course designed to help improve your memory. Write a letter to the organisers of the course. in lettergive some background information about yourselfexplain your own problems and why you would like to do the courseenquire ab v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam This is Aidin Farughi. I saw your ad the other day and I have become interested in taking part in the course. My field of work is dentistry and right now I am 28 years old. What is bothering me recently is that I find it hard to remember stuff. Unlike what it used to be, important facts are slipping my mind these days and since I am going to have the AFK exam in months to come, this matter is starting to become worrisome. I was wondering if you could tell me about your methods. How are you planning to improve the memory in this course? If there is research about them, I would be happy if you send me the results. Moreover, There was no data on your advertisement about the dates and fees. Knowing these in advance will be so helpful if one wants to sign up. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours truly Aidin Farughi
Dear Sir or Madam

This is Aidin
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Farughi
. I
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saw
your ad the other day and I have become interested in taking part in the course. My field of work is dentistry and right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
I am 28 years
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old
.

What is bothering me recently is that I find it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to remember stuff. Unlike what it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to be,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
facts are slipping my mind these days and since I am going to have the AFK exam in months to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
, this matter is starting to become worrisome.

I was wondering if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
me about your methods. How are you planning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the memory in this course? If there is research about them, I would be happy if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me the results.
Moreover
, There was no data on your advertisement about the dates and fees. Knowing these in advance will be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
helpful if one wants to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sign
up.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
truly


Aidin
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Farughi
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You see an advertisement for a course designed to help improve your memory. Write a letter to the organisers of the course. in lettergive some background information about yourselfexplain your own problems and why you would like to do the courseenquire ab v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
164 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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