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You saw an advertisement for a skiing course in Canada but you have one or two problems and can’t stay for the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter• explain your interest in the course• describe your problems• find ou v.2

You saw an advertisement for a skiing course in Canada but you have one or two problems and can’t stay for the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter• explain your interest in the course• describe your problems• find ou v. 2
Dear course Director, Good day to you. My name is Mohammed Aslam. I am from India. I completed my bachelor degree in Anna University. I noticed your advertisement in New England news paper. I am very enthusiastic by heard that news, that you are going to conduct a skiing course in canada. I am very much interested to join in that course. But unfortunately, I have a problem which I could not able to attend the complete course. Actually, Here my degree semester exam is going to start on 1st March 2017. I looked around the possible way to skip the semester exam. But I can' t. It is very important exam which I should not missed it. Even though I don' t want to miss this wonderful opportunity which I never got in my life. I am ready to pay my full fees, but is there any possibility to refund the money for the non-attended course. I am looking for your valuable and splendid reply from you. Thanking you. Yours truly, Aslam
Dear course Director,

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Good
day to you. My name
is Mohammed
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Aslam
. I am from India. I completed my bachelor degree in Anna University.
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I
noticed your advertisement in New England
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news paper
.
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I
am
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very
enthusiastic by heard that news, that you are going to conduct a skiing course in
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canada
.
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I
am
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very
much interested to
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join
in that course.

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But
unfortunately, I have a problem which I could not able to attend the complete course. Actually, Here my degree semester exam is going to
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start
on 1st March 2017. I looked around the possible way to skip the semester exam.
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But
I
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can&
#039; t. It is
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very
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important
exam which I should not
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missed
it.

Even though
I
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don&
#039; t want to miss this wonderful opportunity which I never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
in my life. I am ready to pay my full fees,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
is there any possibility to refund the money for the non-attended course.

I am looking for your valuable and splendid reply from you.

Thanking you.

Yours
truly
,

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Aslam
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS letter You saw an advertisement for a skiing course in Canada but you have one or two problems and can’t stay for the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter• explain your interest in the course• describe your problems• find ou v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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