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04/11/2017 You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a freind who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this freind. In your lettergive details of your study planexplai v.2

04/11/2017 You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a freind who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this freind. In your lettergive details of your study planexplai v. 2
Dear John, I am writing to ask you about a favor. As you know, I am going to study in your country for a year. In fact, I arrive on 29th August and my studying begins on 1st September. Fortunately, my curriculum has been sent to me in advance; so, I knew my schedule already. Apparently, I will study from Monday to Friday, my lectures and classes will start at 08: 15 am and be finished by 04: 00 pm. Consequently, I have a plethora of spare time that can be devoted to a part-time job. Frankly, I need this job because it is the quickest and the most efficient way to improve my speaking English. Moreover, the United States of America is an expensive country for living and I will definitely need additional cash that may be spent on having fun and partying. I hope you can help me by advising me how to find a decent job in your area. What sources should I use? Are printed newspapers a better source of information than the internet? In addition, I would like that you ask friends and acquaintances whether they need a new employee with my skills or not? I knew you have a large number of friends, maybe you will find me a job. I am waiting for your prompt response. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk.
Dear John,

I am writing to ask you about a favor. As you know, I am going to study in your country for a year. In fact, I arrive on 29th August and my studying
begins
on 1st September.
Fortunately
, my curriculum has been
sent
to me in advance;
so
, I knew my schedule already.
Apparently
, I will study from Monday to Friday, my lectures and classes will
start
at 08: 15 am and
be finished
by 04: 00 pm.
Consequently
, I have a plethora of spare time that can
be devoted
to a part-time job.

Frankly
, I need this job
because
it is the quickest and the most efficient way to
improve
my speaking English.
Moreover
, the United States of America is an expensive country for living and I will definitely need additional cash that may
be spent
on having fun and partying.

I hope you can
help
me by advising me how to find a decent job in your area. What sources should I
use
?
Are printed
newspapers a better source of information than the internet?
In addition
, I would like that you ask friends and acquaintances whether they need a new employee with my
skills
or not? I knew you have
a large number of
friends, maybe you will find me a job.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter 04/11/2017 You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a freind who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this freind. In your lettergive details of your study planexplai v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
227 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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