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You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and cannot stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: Explain your interest in the course; Describe you problems; Find out if a ref v. 2

Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Linh, and I am writing to ask you about a tennis course which I enrolled last week. As a sports enthusiast, I felt extremely delightful when I saw an advertisement of your tennis course in my schools. Furthermore, learning this course means that I have a chance to meet trainer Harry – the best tennis player I have met. I always idolized him during I was young. In addition to that, the tennis place near my house and suitable for my schedule. However, I have to say that I can not stay for the whole course for several private problems. As you know, I am an exchange student, so my study period at Oxford University will finish at the end of the month, but your tennis course is planned to complete in two months later. I wonder as my circumstance, I could receive the refund back? Thank you for spending your time with me. Yours faithfully, Linh Bui

IELTS letter You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and cannot stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: Explain your interest in the course; Describe you problems; Find out if a ref v.2

Dear Sir/Madam, My name is
Linh
, and I am writing to ask you about a tennis
course
which I enrolled last week. As a sports enthusiast, I felt
extremely
delightful when I
saw
an
advertisement of
your tennis
course
in my schools.
Furthermore
, learning this
course
means that I have a chance to
meet
trainer Harry
the best tennis player I have met. I always idolized him during I was young.
In addition
to that, the tennis place near my
house
and suitable for my schedule.
However
, I
have to
say that I can not stay for the whole
course
for several private problems. As you know, I am an exchange student,
so
my study period at Oxford University will finish at the
end
of the month,
but
your tennis
course
is planned
to complete in two months later. I wonder as my circumstance, I could receive the refund back? Thank you for spending your time with me. Yours
faithfully
,
Linh
Bui
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
Letter
8 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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