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You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and cannot stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: Explain your interest in the course; Describe you problems; Find out if a ref v.2

You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and cannot stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: Explain your interest in the course; Describe you problems; Find out if a ref v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, My name is Linh, and I am writing to ask you about a tennis course which I enrolled last week. As a sports enthusiast, I felt extremely delightful when I saw an advertisement of your tennis course in my schools. Furthermore, learning this course means that I have a chance to meet trainer Harry – the best tennis player I have met. I always idolized him during I was young. In addition to that, the tennis place near my house and suitable for my schedule. However, I have to say that I can not stay for the whole course for several private problems. As you know, I am an exchange student, so my study period at Oxford University will finish at the end of the month, but your tennis course is planned to complete in two months later. I wonder as my circumstance, I could receive the refund back? Thank you for spending your time with me. Yours faithfully, Linh Bui
Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is
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Linh
, and I am writing to ask you about a tennis
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
which I enrolled last week.

As a sports enthusiast, I felt
extremely
delightful when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
an
The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?
advertisement of
your tennis
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
in my schools.
Furthermore
, learning this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
means that I have a chance to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
trainer Harry
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
the best tennis player I have met. I always idolized him during I was young.
In addition
to that, the tennis place near my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and suitable for my schedule.

However
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
say that I can not stay for the whole
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
for several private problems.

As you know, I am an exchange student,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
my study period at Oxford University will finish at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the month,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
your tennis
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
is planned
to complete in two months later. I wonder as my circumstance, I could receive the refund back?

Thank you for spending your time with me.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Linh
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Bui
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and cannot stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: Explain your interest in the course; Describe you problems; Find out if a ref v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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