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You saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event 1 Explain why you are interested in helping 2 give details suitable past experience 3 suggest ways you might help with the event v.2

You saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event 1 Explain why you are interested in helping 2 give details suitable past experience 3 suggest ways you might help with the event v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter in regard to the advertisement published in the Times of India newspaper on Sunday. The advert was asking for some volunteers for a dancing event, which is going to be held on the next weekend in the town hall of the city. I would like to participate in this charity function. I am very much interested in helping for two main reasons. First and foremost, the reason for this free service is the cause of this event is very noble because the revenue from this function will be given to various orphanages. The second reason for the participation is dancing, as it is my hobby. I like to perform various shows and it would be my pleasure if my dancing skills can be valuable to others. I can prepare a traditional dance for my performance. The duration of the act could be 5 to 15 minutes and this can increase or decrease depending on the programme schedule. I would love to be an active volunteer for this noble deed. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Harman Kaur
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter in regard to the advertisement published in
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the Times of India
newspaper on Sunday. The advert was asking for
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some
volunteers for a dancing
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event
, which is going to
be held
on the
next
weekend in the town hall of the city. I would like to participate in this charity function.

I am
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very
much interested in helping for two main reasons.
First
and foremost, the reason for this free service is the cause of this
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event
is
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very
noble
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because
the revenue from this function will be
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given
to various orphanages. The second reason for the participation is dancing, as it is my hobby. I like to perform various
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
and it would be my pleasure if my dancing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
can be valuable to others.

I can prepare a traditional dance for my performance. The duration of the act could be 5 to 15 minutes and this can increase or decrease depending on the
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programme
schedule. I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to be an active volunteer for this noble deed.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Harman
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Kaur
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0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event 1 Explain why you are interested in helping 2 give details suitable past experience 3 suggest ways you might help with the event v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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