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You’re interested in a music course that you saw on an advertise. Write a letter to the club. In your letter, you should: explain why you’re interestedrequest more information about the coursetalk about your past experiences. v. 2

Dear Sir, I am writing this letter in response to the advertisement of a music course that your club is offering and would like to express my keen interest in it. Music is my passion, and I have been listening to different types of music since my childhood. However, my interest in this course increased when I read that some professional musician will also teach in the club. I have learnt playing music in different institutes but learning from experts is the main reason why I want to join it. I would like to inquire some information reading classes. First of all, the duration of it was not mentioned. Would you please explain complete time frame and specify different types of music that will be taught in it? Also, could you tell me, if the club offers any membership or discount thereof? My experience of music is more than seven years as I opted for arts in my school. There are several musical instruments that I can play splendidly, such as violin, guitar, piano. My skills of playing violin and guitar made me distinctive in different concerts and also was awarded multiple times for it. I am looking forward to further hearing from you soon about this great learning opportunity. Yours faithfully, Salman Khan

IELTS letter You’re interested in a music course that you saw on an advertise. Write a letter to the club. In your letter, you should: explain why you’re interestedrequest more information about the coursetalk about your past experiences. v.2

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter in response to the
advertisement of
a
music
course that your club is offering and would like to express my keen interest in it.

Music is my passion, and I have been listening to
different
types of
music
since my childhood.
However
, my interest in this course increased when I read that
some
professional musician will
also
teach in the club. I have
learnt
playing
music
in
different
institutes
but
learning from experts is the main reason why I want to
join
it.

I would like to inquire
some
information reading classes.
First of all
, the duration of it was not mentioned. Would you
please
explain
complete time frame and specify
different
types of
music
that will
be taught
in it?
Also
, could you
tell
me, if the club offers any membership or discount thereof?

My experience of
music
is more than seven years as I opted for arts in my school. There are several musical instruments that I can play
splendidly
, such as violin, guitar, piano. My
skills
of playing violin and guitar made me distinctive in
different
concerts and
also
was awarded
multiple times for it.

I am looking forward to
further
hearing from you
soon
about this great learning opportunity.

Yours
faithfully
,

Salman Khan
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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