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IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event: 1. Explain why you are interested in helping2. give details suitable past experience3. suggest ways you might help with the eventWrite at least 150 words. v.2

IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event: 1. Explain why you are interested in helping2. give details suitable past experience3. suggest ways you might help with the event v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I came across your advertisement regarding the fund raising event to support environment protection. I am keen in charity events and always try to participate and provide my help where needed. I have a can do attitude and a passion for protecting the environment. Therefore, I would like to apply for the post. I am a student of Science University and I am studying ecology. I believe I have the right skills and expertise to qualify for the role. I have a profound understanding of environmental challenges as well as relevant experience in conducting the charity events. I have been engaged as a volunteer in a number of fund raising activities arranged by both international and local NGOs. My experience entails analysis of the requirements, planning of events, estimating the budget, and promoting events. I’m keen to offer my help with any of these work streams and beyond. I would be happy to meet and discuss the support I can provide to you with the event. I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon. Regards, A
Dear Sir/Madam,

I came across your advertisement regarding the
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
fund raising
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
event
to support environment protection. I am keen in charity
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
and always try to participate and provide my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
where needed.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have a can do attitude and a passion for protecting the environment.
Therefore
, I would like to apply for the post.

I am a student of Science
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
University and
I am studying ecology. I believe I have the right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and expertise to qualify for the role.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have a profound understanding of environmental challenges
as well
as relevant experience in conducting the charity
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have
been engaged
as a volunteer in a number of
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
fund raising
activities arranged by both international and local NGOs.

My experience entails analysis of the requirements, planning of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
, estimating the budget, and promoting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
events
. I’m keen to offer my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with any of these work streams and beyond. I would be happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
and discuss the support I can provide to you with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
’m looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Regards,

A
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS letter IELTS General Writing - Writing Task IYou saw an advert asking for volunteers to run a charity event: 1. Explain why you are interested in helping2. give details suitable past experience3. suggest ways you might help with the event v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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