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The historical building in your place is in bad condition. Write to the local government. In your letter Why the building is importantwhat is the present conditionwhat actions must be taken v.2

The historical building in your place is in bad condition. Write to the local government. In your letter Why the building is importantwhat is the present conditionwhat actions must be taken v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to bring to your attention about an old library which is considered as one of the historical monument. It represents the symbol of our historic tradition and culture of our country. More over it’s the only library which was inaugurated by Queen Victoria in India. As the building has not gone through any maintenance from last two decades, it is now under devastating condition. Even though pillars of the building are still strong, we can see fissures on the walls and roofs of the building. Although it looks like rock steady externally, the internal strength and paint is deteriorated. This is the only library in the vicinity of the city; as a result it is always crowded by young enthusiastic readers. So, I would request you to take immediate actions by renovating this building as soon as possible to prevent any catastrophic incidents at the library. I look forward for your quick and prompt response. Yours faithfully SHAM
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to bring to your attention about an
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old
library which
is considered
as one of the historical monument. It represents the symbol of our historic tradition and culture of our country. More over it’s the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
library which
was inaugurated
by Queen Victoria in India.

As the
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building
has not gone through any maintenance from last two decades, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
under devastating condition.
Even though
pillars of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
are
still
strong, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
fissures on the walls and roofs of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
. Although it looks like rock steady
externally
, the internal strength and paint
is deteriorated
.

This is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
library in the vicinity of the city;
as a result
it is always crowded by young enthusiastic readers.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I would request you to take immediate actions by renovating this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
any catastrophic incidents at the library.

I look forward for your quick and prompt response.

Yours
faithfully


SHAM
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS letter The historical building in your place is in bad condition. Write to the local government. In your letter Why the building is importantwhat is the present conditionwhat actions must be taken v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
164 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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