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you rented a car from a company and had an accident. write a report to the companywhen and where did it happendescribe how the accident happenedwhat kind of action did you take after the accident v.2

you rented a car from a company and had an accident. write a report to the companywhen and where did it happendescribe how the accident happenedwhat kind of action did you take after the accident v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding the small accident I had with the car hired from your company. While I was in Detroit, I rented a vehicle from your outlet in the downtown. The car was rented from May 12th to the present day, and I would like to commend your company on their professionalism and the great service they delivered. As I was crossing an intersection, another driver hit the car from the side since he had passed the red light. There were no injuries, though, and a police officer became present at the scene within moments. Until further investigation and distinguishing the guilty driver, the police officer took and kept our papers. The other company has been found guilty, thus not only did he apologize to me, but he will have to pay the bills as well as the cost of repairing the car. Since commuting and going around the city is a misery without a car, I would be very happy if you provide another car for me. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Aidin Farughi
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to you regarding the
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small
accident I had with the
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car
hired from your
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company
.

While I was in Detroit, I rented a vehicle from your outlet in the downtown. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
was rented
from May 12th to the present day, and I would like to commend your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
on their professionalism and the great service they delivered.

As I was crossing an intersection, another driver hit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
from the side since he had passed the red light. There were no injuries, though, and a police officer became present at the scene within moments. Until
further
investigation and distinguishing the guilty driver, the police officer took and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
our papers.

The other
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company
has
been found
guilty,
thus
not
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only
did he apologize to me,
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but
he will
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have to
pay the bills
as well
as the cost of repairing the
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car
. Since commuting and going around the city is a misery without a
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car
, I would be
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very
happy if you provide another
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car
for me.

I look forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Aidin
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Farughi
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IELTS letter you rented a car from a company and had an accident. write a report to the companywhen and where did it happendescribe how the accident happenedwhat kind of action did you take after the accident v. 2

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  American English
8 paragraphs
186 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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