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You have recently been offered a full-time job at a company and you can not continue the course. Write a letter to the course instructor. In the letter: •explain why you cannot continue the course•describe the job you have been offered•and ask if they v.2

You have recently been offered a full-time job at a company and you can not continue the course. Write a letter to the course instructor. In the letter: •explain why you cannot continue the course•describe the job you have been offered•and ask if they v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to inform you that I will not be able to continue my course at your training institute as I have been offered a full-time job. I was enrolled in your training institute Amity for a three months course in Business writing and communication course as I have received an offer letter for full-time job in IDFC Mutual Funds. I am expected to join the organisation from 1st of June. Since this job is essential in order to build a successful career, I will not be able to continue with my course along with the job. I have been offered a position of assistant manager with a handsome salary. The working days from Monday to Saturday 9 am to 5 pm. I will be handling all the customer queries through phone and e-mail. Moreover, I will also have to maintain all the MIS File and database of all the clients. Since I will be busy during my office time, I would like to know that if you offer any evening course from 6pm to 7 pm? As I will be able to attend the class after my office. However, if you do not offer any evening course I would like to discontinue and would be grateful if you could refund my remaining amount in my bank account? I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Prabhpreet Kaur
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I will not be able to continue my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
at your training institute as I have
been offered
a full-time job.

I
was enrolled
in your training institute Amity for a three months
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
in Business writing and communication
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
as I have received an offer letter for full-time job in
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IDFC
Mutual Funds.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the
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organisation
from 1st of June. Since this job is essential in order to build a successful career, I will not be able to continue with my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
along with the job.

I have
been offered
a position of assistant manager with a handsome salary. The working days from Monday to Saturday 9 am to 5 pm. I will be handling all the customer queries through phone and e-mail.
Moreover
, I will
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
maintain all the MIS File and database of all the clients.

Since I will be busy during my office time, I would like to know that if you offer any evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
from 6pm to 7 pm? As I will be able to attend the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
after my office.
However
, if you do not offer any evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
I would like to discontinue and would be grateful if you could refund my remaining amount in my bank account?

I am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Prabhpreet
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Kaur
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have recently been offered a full-time job at a company and you can not continue the course. Write a letter to the course instructor. In the letter: •explain why you cannot continue the course•describe the job you have been offered•and ask if they v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
235 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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