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There are plans to build a new factory in parkland near where you live. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter give reasons why you are against the plans explain why the parkland should stay suggest what action the council should t v.1

There are plans to build a new factory in parkland near where you live. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter give reasons why you are against the plans explain why the parkland should stay suggest what action the council should t v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to oppose the plans of constructing a new factory in central park. I am a resident of that area and I frequently visit the park. Building a factory there will adversely effect the residents as well as other species who depend on the park. Let me explain in detail. Being the only park in the town, it is not only frequented my people of age group but also home to a number of migratory birds. Additionally, the park has many trees, some of which are over 100 years old. Destroying the park means cutting down all the tress and consequently driving away the birds and other animals. Despite the fact that the factory will definitely provide employment opportunities to many, it will come at a cost replacing the last open space in town. Therefore, I would be grateful if you could present this argument in the next council meeting and use your power to halt the construction of the factory. Furthermore, a copy of this letter has been sent to the newspaper in order to raise awareness about the issue. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mary Smith
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to oppose the plans of constructing a new
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factory
in central
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park
. I am a resident of that area and I
frequently
visit the
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park
. Building a
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factory
there will
adversely
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effect
the residents
as well
as other species who depend on the park.

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me
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explain
in detail. Being the
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only
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park
in the town, it is not
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only
frequented my
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people
of age group
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but
also
home to a number of migratory birds.
Additionally
, the
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park
has
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many
trees,
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some
of which are over 100 years
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old
. Destroying the
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park
means cutting down all the tress and
consequently
driving away the birds and other animals. Despite the fact that the
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factory
will definitely provide employment opportunities to
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many
, it will
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come
at a cost replacing the last open space in town.

Therefore
, I would be grateful if you could present this argument in the
next
council meeting and
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use
your power to halt the construction of the
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factory
.
Furthermore
, a copy of this letter has been
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sent
to the newspaper in order to raise awareness about the issue.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mary Smith
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter There are plans to build a new factory in parkland near where you live. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter give reasons why you are against the plans explain why the parkland should stay suggest what action the council should t v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
199 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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