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YOU RECENTLY ORDERED ONLINE SOMETHING. WHEN THE DELIVERY CAME IT WAS NOT COMPLETE. Write a letter to the compnay: 1) explain what you ordered and what is missing from your delivery2) explain the importance of this delivery3) ask for a replacement item to be v.2

YOU RECENTLY ORDERED ONLINE SOMETHING. WHEN THE DELIVERY CAME IT WAS NOT COMPLETE. Write a letter to the compnay: 1) explain what you ordered and what is missing from your delivery2) explain the importance of this delivery3) ask for a replacement item to be v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this to complain about the unavailability of the mobile charger that I have received for order number FG5023. I ordered an Apple I-phone6 from your online website on 4th June 2019. The mobile phone was expected to deliver on 8th June, instead, I received it on 7th morning only, which made me happy and excited. On opening the packet, I found that the charger of mobile was missing. The phone without the charger is of no use to me. I want to gift this cell phone to my mother on her 50th Birthday on 15th June. Because of this special occasion, I ordered in advance, but due to unavailability of a charger, the phone cannot be used nor gifted. It is an emotional and significant moment for me to gift the desired cell phone to my mother on her special day. Since the phone cannot be operated without a charger, I would ask you to send me a new mobile phone with an original charger. I want the replacement as early as possible, due to the shortage of time. You can get it collected from the same address you delivered from Monday to Friday between 10 am to 6 pm. Hope my complaint will be given due consideration. Looking forward to quick replacement. Your' s faithfully John Patel.
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this to complain about the unavailability of the mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charger
that I have received for order number FG5023.

I ordered an Apple I-phone6 from your online website on 4th June 2019. The mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to deliver on 8th June,
instead
, I received it on 7th morning
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
, which made me happy and excited. On opening the packet, I found that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charger
of mobile was missing. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
without the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charger
is of no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
to me.

I want to gift this cell
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
to my mother on her 50th Birthday on 15th June.
Because of this
special occasion, I ordered in advance,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
due to unavailability of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charger
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
cannot be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
nor gifted. It is an emotional and significant moment for me to gift the desired cell
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
to my mother on her special day.

Since the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
cannot
be operated
without a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charger
, I would ask you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me a new mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
phone
with an original
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
charger
. I want the replacement as early as possible, due to the shortage of time. You can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
it collected from the same address you delivered from Monday to Friday between 10 am to 6 pm.

Hope my complaint will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
due consideration.

Looking forward to quick replacement.

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faithfully


John Patel.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS letter YOU RECENTLY ORDERED ONLINE SOMETHING. WHEN THE DELIVERY CAME IT WAS NOT COMPLETE. Write a letter to the compnay: 1) explain what you ordered and what is missing from your delivery2) explain the importance of this delivery3) ask for a replacement item to be v. 2

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223 words
6.5
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