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You ordered an item on a company website, which should have been delivered the next day, but it never turned up. Write a letter to the manager and say- what was the item- why it was important that you get it immediately- what you suggest the company shoul v.1

You ordered an item on a company website, which should have been delivered the next day, but it never turned up. Write a letter to the manager and say- what was the item- why it was important that you get it immediately- what you suggest the company shoul v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with your poor service I have received from your company website. Last Monday on 21th of July, I bought an external hard disk from your website DigiKala. Its capacity is about 1T and it is produced by Western Digital Company. Although it was supposed to deliver the following day, it has not arrived yet. My laptop recently has broken and all of my files include my thesis and company’s projects were saved on it. Therefore in order to transfer my information from the broken one, I will need a backup hard. If my thesis’s deadline were not on the following week, I would not in a hurry to access to my files as soon as possible and it is obvious without a backup hard I cannot. According to your policy, I am be entitled to ask a full refund or replacement. As I explained, I really need the hard, so I think the best solution would be send me another external hard by your express post. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with your poor service I have received from your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
website.

Last Monday on
Please check the suffix, if this is an ordinal number.
21th
of July, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
an external
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hard
disk from your website
Possible spelling mistake found.
DigiKala
. Its capacity is about 1T and it
is produced
by Western Digital
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Company
. Although it
was supposed
to deliver the following day, it has not arrived
yet
. My laptop recently has broken and all of my files include my thesis and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
’s projects
were saved
on it.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
in order to transfer my information from the broken one, I will need a backup
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
.

If my thesis’s deadline were not on the following week, I would not in a hurry to access to my files as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible and it is obvious without a backup
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hard
I cannot. According to your policy, I am
be entitled
to ask a full refund or replacement. As I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
, I
really
need the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hard
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
the best solution would be
Consider using the past participle "sent"?
send
me another external
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hard
by your express post.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS letter You ordered an item on a company website, which should have been delivered the next day, but it never turned up. Write a letter to the manager and say- what was the item- why it was important that you get it immediately- what you suggest the company shoul v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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