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You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was damaged. Write a letter to the company that sold you the item. In your letter: give details about the order you madeexplain what was wrong with the itemtell the company what you want them t v. 6

Respected Sir or Madam, My self Arshdeepsingh, a resident of Distt Faridkot, I am writing this letter to bring your attention upon my smart phone Samsung Galaxy S 4 which had been recently ordered by me from your online shop. Firstly, I would like to tell you that, I had ordered this phone last month on 14th January 2018. I was looking forward very curiously to receiving the phone and start using it but when the phone finally arrived after two days later Unfortunately, Having uncovered the phone, I found that the phone screen was broken. I used my VISA credit card to pay for the order, it was not in the good condition. I am disappointed with your service. I hope you will consider upon my inconvenience and take appropriate action to replace a new mobile phone. Otherwise refund my whole money in a same bank account. Yours faithfully, Arshdeep singh

IELTS letter You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was damaged. Write a letter to the company that sold you the item. In your letter: give details about the order you madeexplain what was wrong with the itemtell the company what you want them t v.6

Respected Sir or Madam, My self
Arshdeepsingh
, a resident of
Distt
Faridkot
, I am writing this letter to bring your attention upon my smart
phone
Samsung Galaxy S 4 which had been recently ordered by me from your online shop.
Firstly
, I would like to
tell
you that, I had ordered this
phone
last month on 14th January 2018. I was looking forward
very
curiously
to receiving the
phone
and
start
using it
but
when the
phone
finally
arrived after two days later Unfortunately, Having uncovered the
phone
, I found that the
phone
screen
was broken
. I
used
my VISA credit card to pay for the order, it was not in the
good
condition.
I
am disappointed
with your service.
I
hope you will consider upon my inconvenience and take appropriate action to replace a new mobile
phone
.
Otherwise
refund my whole money in a same bank account. Yours
faithfully
,
Arshdeep
singh
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
Letter
6 paragraphs
151 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≤ 6
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