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the graph below shows the quantity of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. v.2

the graph below shows the quantity of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. v. 2
The line graph depicts the amount of products which was supplied to UK by using distinct transport modes. The data is calibrated in millions. The most striking feature to be observed is that, the large amount of goods was transfer by roads. It can be vividly seen that, from 1974 to 2002, delivery of products through roads was increased with 70 to 100 millions of tonnes. Between 1974 to 1978, the amount of goods was less transport through ships. Further, the supply of goods by using water transport modes followed an increasing trend and reached at 70 millions tonnes. Turning to rest of description, from 1974 to 1994, the use of rails was used for 34 million tonnes of products. Further, transport of products was rises by using rails with 40 millions tonnes. Between 1974 to 1990, the delivery of goods through pipeline was 15 million tonnes only but it escalating and reached at 25 millions tonnes in 2002. As far a comparison is concerned, the delivery of goods was doubled through roads compare to pipeline. Moreover, the figure of rails and water transport modes was same in starting years but it changed in the last year.
The line graph depicts the amount of
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products
which
was supplied
to UK by using distinct
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transport
modes. The data
is calibrated
in millions.

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The
most striking feature to
be observed
is that, the large amount of
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goods
was transfer by roads.

It can be
vividly
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seen
that, from 1974 to 2002, delivery of
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products
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through
roads
was increased
with 70 to 100
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millions
of tonnes.
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Between 1974 to 1978
, the amount of
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goods
was less
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transport
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through
ships.
Further
, the supply of
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goods
by using water
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transport
modes followed an increasing trend and reached at 70
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millions
tonnes.

Turning to rest of description, from 1974 to 1994, the
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use
of rails was
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used
for 34
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million
tonnes of
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products
.
Further
,
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transport
of
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products
was rises by using rails with 40
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millions
tonnes.
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "Between 1974 and 1990".
Between 1974 to 1990
, the delivery of
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goods
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through
pipeline was 15
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million
tonnes
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only
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but
Did you mean "it's escalating", "it is escalating", or "it was escalating"?
it escalating
and reached at 25
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millions
tonnes in 2002. As far a comparison
is concerned
, the delivery of
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goods
was doubled
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through
roads compare to pipeline.
Moreover
, the figure of rails and water
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transport
modes was same in starting years
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but
it
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changed
in the last year.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter the graph below shows the quantity of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. v. 2

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
197 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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