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You recently met the manager of a new company that started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. However, you cannot accept the job offer. v.4

You recently met the manager of a new company that started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. However, you cannot accept the job offer. v. 4

Dear Mr Roger, Hope you are fine. I thoroughly enjoyed talking to you the other day, and I am also glad and flattered that you have chosen to offer me a position at your company as a Supply Chain Executive. But, as much as I like the offer from your part, unfortunately, I won’t be able to accept it at this time, primarily because I don’t really have any formal experience of working in this particular field. Besides, I am holding a senior position at my current job, and I really like it, even though, it doesn’t pay as much as you are willing to pay me. Hope you understand my position. But, I can certainly recommend a prospective candidate for this job, who I don’t only know personally, but he also has the experience of working as a junior Supply Chain Associate at a small manufacturing firm. Last time, when I talked to him, he was planning to switch his company for a better position. I will send him over to you if you wish. Thank you once again for your generous offer. Yours sincerely, Freddie Marcus

Dear Mr Roger,

Hope you are fine. I thoroughly
 enjoyed talking to you the other day, and I am also
 glad and flattered that you have chosen to offer me a position at your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 as a Supply Chain Executive.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
, as much as I like the offer from your part, unfortunately, I won’t be able to accept it at this time, primarily
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 I don’t really
 have any formal experience of working in this particular field. Besides
, I am holding a senior position at my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :contemporarymodern
current
 job, and I really
 like it, even though
, it doesn’t pay as much as you are willing to pay me. Hope you understand my position.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
, I can certainly
 recommend a prospective candidate for this job, who I don’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 know personally
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 he also
 has the experience of working as a junior Supply Chain Associate at a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 manufacturing firm.

Last time, when I talked to him, he was planning to switch his This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 for a better position. I will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 him over to you if you wish.

Thank you once again for your generous offer.

Yours sincerely
,

Freddie Marcus

4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS letter You recently met the manager of a new company that started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. However, you cannot accept the job offer. v. 4

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

187 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 7.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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