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You recently met a manger of a new company started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. Write to himHow do you feel about the job? Why can’t you accept it? Provide a reference to your friend who mi v.2

You recently met a manger of a new company started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. Write to himHow do you feel about the job? Why can’t you accept it? Provide a reference to your friend who mi v. 2
Dear Sir, Thank you for the opportunity. It was a pleasure meeting you in the marketing event last week. I am really thankful that you have offered me the position of “Senior Tax Manager” in the advisory firm. But unfortunately, I cannot accept the offer as I have a bond with my current employer. Also, I am really satisfied and happy with my current employer and other facilities. Though I cannot accept the job offer, but I would like to refer one of my friend who is seeking a job opportunity and he is experienced in global taxation. Please let me know, if you would like to meet him to discuss his credentials. After hearing from you, I can ask him to send you his CV ta take this forward. Once again thank you for the job offer, I regret not accepting offer but after completing the bond with my current employer, I would connect you for any open opportunities. Looking forward for your reply. Yours faithfully Kritika Rastogi
Dear Sir,

Thank you for the opportunity.

It was a pleasure meeting you in the marketing
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event
last week. I am
really
thankful that you have offered me the position of “Senior Tax Manager” in the advisory firm.
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But
unfortunately, I cannot accept the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
offer
as I have a bond with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
employer.
Also
, I am
really
satisfied and happy with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
employer and other facilities.

Though I cannot accept the job
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
offer
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I would like to refer one of my friend who is seeking a job
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
opportunity and
he
is experienced
in global taxation.
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Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know
If " if" starts an indirect question, you do not need to put a comma before it.
, if
you would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
him to discuss his credentials. After hearing from you, I can ask him to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
you his CV ta take this forward.

Once again thank you for the job
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
offer
, I regret not accepting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
offer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
after completing the bond with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
employer, I would connect you for any open opportunities.

Looking forward for your reply.

Yours
faithfully


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IELTS letter You recently met a manger of a new company started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. Write to himHow do you feel about the job? Why can’t you accept it? Provide a reference to your friend who mi v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
168 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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