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You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. v.4

You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. v. 4
Dear Emma, How are you? I haven't seen you for a while and wish everything is fine. Anyway, I am writing because I am inviting you to enjoy a music concert titled ” EXO PLANET#2 – The EXO'LuXion” and it will be held on 17th August in Aisa-World Arena in Hong Kong. I am so eagerly waiting to enjoy this music concert together. I am sure you already know that EXO band is a Chinese-South Korean boy band based in Seoul. Formed by S. M. Entertainment in 2011 it is now a famous music band in our area. I guess you know this band since you are a big fan of K-Pop music. They will perform 27 songs and play games with fans. ChanYeol (a member of this band) will solo a program that is dancing in the water. You can scream loudly for the members you like and in the meantime, that can help you release stresses. You will see the silver sea which consists of glow sticks. It's totally a fantastic world. Anyway, do let me know if you can make it. My new number is at the top of the page, so you can give me a call anytime. Take care and see you soon. I am looking forward to enjoying this music concert with you. Warm wishes, Shirley
Dear Emma,

How are you? I haven't
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seen
you for a while and wish everything is fine. Anyway, I am writing
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because
I am inviting you to enjoy a
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music
concert titled
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”
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EXO
PLANET#2
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–
The
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EXO
'
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LuXion
” and it will
be held
on 17th August in
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Aisa-World
Arena in Hong Kong. I am
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so
eagerly
waiting to enjoy this
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music
concert together.

I am sure you already know that
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EXO
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band
is a Chinese-South Korean boy
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band
based in Seoul. Formed by S. M. Entertainment in 2011 it is
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now
a
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famous
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music
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band
in our area. I guess you know this
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band
since you are a
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big
fan of K-Pop
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music
. They will perform 27 songs and play games with fans.
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ChanYeol
(a member of this
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band)
will solo a program
that is
dancing in the water. You can scream
loudly
for the members you like and in the meantime, that can
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help
you release
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stresses
. You will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the silver sea which consists of glow sticks. It's
totally
a fantastic world.

Anyway, do
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let
me know if you can
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make
it. My new number is at the top of the page,
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so
you can give me a call anytime.

Take care and
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see
you
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soon
. I am looking forward to enjoying this
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music
concert with you.

Warm wishes,

Shirley
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
221 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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