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You recently met the manager of a new company that started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. However, you cannot accept the job offer. v. 1

Dear Mr Alex, Hope you are doing great. I thoroughly enjoyed our conversation during our meeting and would like to thank you for a fabulous lunch. I am so honoured to be offered a job at your company. However, I cannot accept it right now. I am really fortunate that you have offered me the position of “Design Engineer” in the Biomedical Device Manufacturing company that you have recently started in our city. But unfortunately, I am in a situation to deny this offer because of the contract I have with my current employer. I am quite happy with the remuneration, working environment and facilities I get from my current job and have no plan to change my job now. Though I cannot be a part of your new team, I could suggest one of my friends - Ruhan Chowdhury,   who is a passionate Engineer and is currently seeking a job opportunity. After hearing from you, I can ask him to meet you personally for an interview to discuss his credentials. He is a talented individual and I believe he would add value to your company. I regret not accepting this offer but I hope once my contract is over, I would be privileged to work for your company and thank you for the offer. Looking forward to receiving your reply soon. Yours faithfully, S. Nivetha

IELTS letter You recently met the manager of a new company that started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. However, you cannot accept the job offer. v.1

Dear Mr Alex, Hope you are doing great. I
thoroughly
enjoyed our conversation during our meeting and would like to thank you for a fabulous lunch. I am
so
honoured
to
be offered
a job at your
company
.
However
, I cannot accept it right
now
. I am
really
fortunate that you have offered me the position of “Design Engineer” in the Biomedical Device Manufacturing
company
that you have recently
started
in our city.
But
unfortunately, I am in a situation to deny this offer
because
of the contract I have with my
current
employer. I am quite happy with the remuneration, working environment and facilities I
get
from my
current
job and have no plan to
change
my job
now
. Though I cannot be a part of your new team, I could suggest one of my friends
-
Ruhan
Chowdhury
,
 
who is a passionate Engineer and is
currently
seeking a job opportunity. After hearing from you, I can ask him to
meet
you
personally
for an interview to discuss his credentials. He is a talented individual and I believe he would
add
value to your
company
. I regret not accepting this offer
but
I hope once my contract is over, I would
be privileged
to work for your
company
and thank you for the offer. Looking forward to receiving your reply
soon
. Yours
faithfully
, S.
Nivetha
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
8 paragraphs
226 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Band score ≥ 7
  • Band score ≤ 6
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