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You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. v.3

You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. v. 3
Dear Taylor, It has been a while since I have talked to you or met you in person.   So, I hope that everything is well with you. Anyway, I am writing to request you to accompany me to a musical concert which will be held on June 25. With regard to the concert and its content, it will be an open-air music concert which will take place at the National Football Stadium in my hometown in Montreal. I am asking you to go with me because I believe you will love the concert since a couple of your favourite and a few other top-class country singers are going to play some of their most popular music. Besides, there also be some techno music there, and I know how much you like it. Besides, I don’t think that I would really be able to enjoy the concert all by myself. So, let me know what you think about the idea. But, if you are really interested to accompany me to the concert, just let me know within a few days so that I can purchase the tickets for both of us in advance. Warm wishes, Julian Gonzalez
Dear Taylor,

It has been a while since I have talked to you or met you in person.
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, I hope that everything is well with you. Anyway, I am writing to request you to accompany me to a musical
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concert
which will
be held
on June 25.

With regard to the
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concert
and its content, it will be an open-air music
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
concert
which will take place at the National Football Stadium in my hometown in Montreal. I am asking you to
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go with
me
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because
I believe you will
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love
the
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concert
since a couple of your
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favourite
and a few other top-
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class
country singers are going to play
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some
of their most popular music.
Besides
, there
also
be
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some
techno music there, and I know how much you like it.
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Besides
, I don’t
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think
that I would
really
be able to enjoy the
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concert
all by myself.

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So
,
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let
me know what you
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think
about the
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idea
.
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But
, if you are
really
interested to accompany me to the
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concert
,
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just
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let
me know within a few days
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so
that I can
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purchase
the tickets for both of us in advance.

Warm wishes,

Julian Gonzalez
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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