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You recently met the manager of a new company that started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. However, you cannot accept the job offer. v.2

You recently met the manager of a new company that started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. However, you cannot accept the job offer. v. 2
Dear Mr Roger, Hope you are fine. I thoroughly enjoyed talking to you the other day, and I am also glad and flattered that you have chosen to offer me a position at your company as a Supply Chain Executive. But, as much as I like the offer from your part, unfortunately, I won’t be able to accept it at this time, primarily because I don’t really have any formal experience of working in this particular field. Besides, I am holding a senior position at my current job, and I really like it, even though, it doesn’t pay as much as you are willing to pay me. Hope you understand my position. But, I can certainly recommend a prospective candidate for this job, who I don’t only know personally, but he also has the experience of working as a junior Supply Chain Associate at a small manufacturing firm. Last time, when I talked to him, he was planning to switch his company for a better position. I will send him over to you if you wish. Thank you once again for your generous offer. Yours sincerely, Freddie Marcus
Dear Mr Roger,

Hope you are fine. I
thoroughly
enjoyed talking to you the other day, and I am
also
glad and flattered that you have chosen to offer me a position at your
company
as a Supply Chain Executive.

But
, as much as I like the offer from your part, unfortunately, I won’t be able to accept it at this time,
primarily
because
I don’t
really
have any formal experience of working in this particular field.
Besides
, I am holding a senior position at my
current
job, and I
really
like it,
even though
, it doesn’t pay as much as you are willing to pay me. Hope you understand my position.

But
, I can
certainly
recommend a prospective candidate for this job, who I don’t
only
know
personally
,
but
he
also
has the experience of working as a junior Supply Chain Associate at a
small
manufacturing firm.

Last time, when I talked to him, he was planning to switch his
company
for a better position. I will
send
him over to you if you wish.

Thank you once again for your generous offer.

Yours
sincerely
,

Freddie Marcus
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS letter You recently met the manager of a new company that started in your city. After the meeting, the manager wrote you a letter offering a job at this company. However, you cannot accept the job offer. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
187 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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