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You recently hired a restaurant to host an office party at work, but there were several problems with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Give details of the food and services you orderedDescribe the problems t v.2

You recently hired a restaurant to host an office party at work, but there were several problems with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Give details of the food and services you orderedDescribe the problems t v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing to complain about the dissatisfactory food and service during our office party hosted by your restaurant last Saturday. First of all, I would like to mention the items and service we ordered. As it was our annual party celebration, we requested choco chips cake, followed by chicken chilly starters for everyone along with mocktails. Lastly, we asked for poolside tables for our dinner. We expected the chocolate flavour cake, instead, we were served fruitcake. Unfortunately, due to unavailability of chocolate flavour and despite disliking fruitcake by most of us in the party, we started the celebration with it. In addition, because of shortage of mocktails all party members were not served with it and we had to replace it by lemonade. Furthermore, though the starters were served hot and nicely, it tasted sour and bitter. Consequently, our mood for having a nice dinner was already spoiled. Finally, they also did not make our seating arrangement in poolside. I request you to provide 50% refund of the total bill paid to you. Moreover, a written apology to my team would be really appreciable. Hope you would take these steps to maintain our cordial relationship and revert me back soon! Yours Sincerely, xxx
Dear Sir,

I am writing to complain about the
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dissatisfactory
food and service during our office
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
hosted by your restaurant last Saturday.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I would like to mention the items and service we ordered. As it was our annual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
celebration, we requested
Possible spelling mistake found.
choco
chips cake, followed by chicken chilly starters for everyone along with mocktails.
Lastly
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
asked for
poolside tables for our dinner.

We
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
the chocolate
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flavour
cake,
instead
, we
were served
fruitcake. Unfortunately, due to unavailability of chocolate
Possible spelling mistake. 'flavour' is British English.
flavour
and despite disliking fruitcake by most of us in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
the celebration with it.
In addition
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of shortage of mocktails all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
members were not served with
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
it and
we had to replace it by lemonade.
Furthermore
, though the starters
were served
hot and
nicely
, it tasted sour and bitter.
Consequently
, our mood for having a nice dinner was already spoiled.
Finally
, they
also
did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
our seating arrangement in poolside.

I request you to provide 50% refund of the total bill paid to you.
Moreover
, a written apology to my team would be
really
appreciable.

Hope you would take these steps to maintain our cordial relationship and revert me back
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
!

Yours
Sincerely
,

xxx
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently hired a restaurant to host an office party at work, but there were several problems with the food and service. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter: Give details of the food and services you orderedDescribe the problems t v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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