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You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: • Explain when and how long you will be in town. • Ask whether you can stay at their home. • Offer to pay for yourself. v.2

You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: • Explain when and how long you will be in town. • Ask whether you can stay at their home. • Offer to pay for yourself. v. 2
Dear Cathy, It’s been long since I last saw you. How are you? I will be visiting Singapore in the beginning of next month for some research work. Initial planning is to be in the city for 5 days, but I might extend it couple of days in case any of the factory visit get postponed. After checking the google map, I came to realize that the research center where I will be reporting everyday is just two stops away in bus from your residence. So, how about I stay at your home if you are in town and got some spare space? I will genuinely appreciate it as it will be the best way for me to make the most of the trip by spending time with you and you little daughters. Lastly and most importantly, I would like you to accept a nominal fees for my stay as I will be reimbursed from the host organization anyway. Also, I would not feel comfortable staying at your place for free, especially because this is a work trip. I will wait for your reply! Take care, Shahla
Dear Cathy,

It’s been long since I last
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
you. How are you?

I will be visiting Singapore in the beginning of
next
month for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
research work. Initial planning is to be in the city for 5 days,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I might extend it couple of days in case any of the factory visit
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
postponed.

After checking the
"Google" is a proper noun and needs to be capitalized.
google
map, I came to realize that the research center where I will be reporting
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
two
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stops
away in bus from your residence.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, how about I stay at your home if you are in town and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
spare space? I will
genuinely
appreciate it as it will be the best way for me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the most of the trip by spending time with you and you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
daughters.

Lastly
and most
importantly
, I would like you to accept a nominal fees for my stay as I will
be reimbursed
from the host organization anyway.
Also
, I would not feel comfortable staying at your place for free,
especially
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
this is a work trip.

I will wait for your reply!

Take care,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Shahla
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives. Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: • Explain when and how long you will be in town. • Ask whether you can stay at their home. • Offer to pay for yourself. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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