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You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. v.5

You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. v. 5
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a regular customer of your store and have found all my interactions with your office very satisfactory. But, I am sorry to say that the service I received last week, to have my personal computer repaired, was not as per your excellence. I am hoping that you would rectify the issue to keep your reputation intact. First of all, the front desk technician was not available at the time of our prescheduled appointment. I had to wait 45 minutes for him to appear. However, this was just the beginning of the poor service I experience yesterday. He did not seem to have enough understanding of the computer hardware and Linux operating system and it took me 30 minutes to explain the problem and then he accepted my computer for the warranty. On 19th November, when I collected my computer, I noticed that the invoice includes the cost of the keypad replacement! I never lodged a request to change the keyboard! I request you to look into this matter and remove the keyboard replacement charge from the invoice. Also, appoint technically sound personnel to your service team as they represent your company. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Ramanuj Sharma
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a regular customer of your store and have found all my interactions with your office
very
satisfactory.
But
, I am sorry to say that the service I received last week, to have my personal computer repaired, was not as per your excellence. I am hoping that you would rectify the issue to
keep
your reputation intact.

First of all
, the front desk technician was not available at the time of our
prescheduled
appointment. I had to wait 45 minutes for him to appear.
However
, this was
just
the beginning of the poor service I experience yesterday. He did not seem to have
enough
understanding of the computer hardware and Linux operating system and it took me 30 minutes to
explain
the
problem and
then he
accepted
my computer for the warranty. On 19th November, when I collected my computer, I noticed that the invoice includes the cost of the keypad replacement! I never lodged a request to
change
the keyboard!

I request you to look into this matter and remove the keyboard replacement charge from the invoice.
Also
, appoint
technically
sound personnel to your service team as they represent your
company
.

I am looking forward to hearing from you
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ramanuj
Sharma
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. v. 5

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
209 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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