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You purchased a children's toy from the Internet. When you got the toy, it had some problems. Write a letter to the manager. . describe the toy, what the problem was, what action you want them to take. v.2

You purchased a children's toy from the Internet. When you got the toy, it had some problems. Write a letter to the manager. . describe the toy, what the problem was, what action you want them to take. v. 2
Dear Sir, I am writing in regard to the defected piece delivered to me. I purchased a toy from your website last week, and my order number is 2314. It is my sons birthday on the 12th of July, and I promised him his favorite toy, the Marvel superhero limited edition of the Iron Man. Having read some impressive reviews about your services and timely delivery commitments, I decided to place an order for my son’s birthday present with Amazon. A birthday party without his most requested present will be incomplete. My order has arrived on time, although the arm of the action fixture is broken. I would like you to immediately replace it with a new, intact piece. I also suggest you run a quick quality check through all your packages before it proceeds for delivery. My husband is home on Thursdays, so kindly do the needful by this week itself. I hope you shall take prompt action to resolve my problem, without further delay. I would also like you to give me a free delivery for the inconvenienced caused to me. I wish to continue having uninterrupted, pleasant experiences with your company and I hope you will live up to your commitments. Yours sincerely, Chandrika
Dear Sir,

I am writing in regard to the defected piece delivered to me. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
a toy from your website last week, and my order number is 2314.

It is my sons birthday on the 12th of July, and I promised him his favorite toy, the Marvel superhero limited edition of the Iron
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Man
. Having read
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
impressive reviews about your services and timely delivery commitments, I decided to place an order for my son’s birthday present with Amazon. A birthday party without his most requested present will be incomplete.

My order has arrived on time, although the arm of the action fixture
is broken
. I would like you to immediately replace it with a new, intact piece. I
also
suggest you run a quick quality
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
through all your packages
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
it proceeds for delivery. My husband is home on Thursdays,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
kindly do the needful by this week itself.

I hope you shall take prompt action to resolve my problem, without
further
delay. I would
also
like you to give me a free delivery for the inconvenienced caused to me.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
wish to continue having uninterrupted, pleasant experiences with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and I hope you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
up to your commitments.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Chandrika
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You purchased a children's toy from the Internet. When you got the toy, it had some problems. Write a letter to the manager. . describe the toy, what the problem was, what action you want them to take. v. 2

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  American English
7 paragraphs
206 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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