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You have seen an advertisement in your local newspaper for a hotel receptionist Write a letter of application to the hotel manager Write about your experience and qualifications and say why you would like the job Also state when you would be available for v.2

You have seen an advertisement in your local newspaper for a hotel receptionist Write a letter of application to the hotel manager Write about your experience and qualifications and say why you would like the job Also state when you would be available for v. 2
Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing this letter I am writing this letter to apply for the vacancy of hotel receptionist. I knew about it from the advertisement published in the local newspaper on Monday the 5th of December I am graduate of the faculty so arts, English Literature department. Also, I am currently studying for my masters degree in English literature at Cairo university. I had worked for two years in an international communications company' s costumer service. My current post is a receptionist in a five stars hotel in Hurghada. I have been working there for five years now. I would like to join the team of your hotel for several reasons. Of the most importance, the hotel is one of the most luxurious establishments I Cairo and anyone would be honored to work there. Furthermore, I have to leave Hurghada an move to Cairo to complete my masters degree' s studies which means that I have to quit my current job. I am available for an interview at your nearest convenience. Looking forward to hearing from you, Yours faithfully, Mirna Milad
Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing this letter I am writing this letter to apply for the vacancy of
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hotel
receptionist. I knew about it from the advertisement published in the local newspaper on Monday the 5th of
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December


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I
am graduate of the faculty
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so
arts, English Literature department.
Also
, I am
currently
studying for my
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masters
degree in English literature at Cairo university. I had worked for two years in an international
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communications
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company&
#039; s costumer service. My
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current
post is a receptionist in a five stars
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hotel
in
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Hurghada
. I have been working there for five years
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now
.

I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the team of your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hotel
for several reasons. Of the most importance, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hotel
is one of the most luxurious establishments I Cairo and anyone would
be honored
to work there.
Furthermore
, I
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have to
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leave
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Hurghada
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an
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move
to Cairo to complete my masters
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degree&
#039; s studies which means that I
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have to
quit my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
job.

I am available for an interview at your nearest convenience.

Looking forward to hearing from you,

Yours
faithfully
,

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Mirna
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Milad
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in your local newspaper for a hotel receptionist Write a letter of application to the hotel manager Write about your experience and qualifications and say why you would like the job Also state when you would be available for v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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