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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall You have been told however that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall Write a letter to the manager In the letter describe what v.2

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall You have been told however that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall Write a letter to the manager In the letter describe what v. 2
Dear Sir, I am Sayu from Gallileo band practising music along with my other musicians in the group on every Tuesdays and Fridays evening in your community hall located in Hammersmith, London. I am writing to you Today that we have been advised recently that the community hall will not be available on our usual rehearsal days. We together, Gallileo band, organise many public events to raise a fund for our community development and also to donate some money for free education to the middle class students that we have recently introduced. I would like to bring to your note that, our community’s name and benefits that we offer to the poor people are established through our musician trope wherever we host our event. Therefore, our community is getting recognized not only locally but also throughout the nation. Consequently, we receive more donations from various people. We are fine to adjust our practising time instead of Tuesday and Friday evenings, we can push forward to Wednesday and Saturday Mornings. I look forward to hearing your usual support. Your sincerely, Sayu
Dear Sir,

I am
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Sayu
from
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Gallileo
band
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practising
music along with my other musicians in the group on every Tuesdays and Fridays evening in your
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community
hall located in Hammersmith, London. I am writing to you
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Today
that we have
been advised
recently that the
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community
hall will not be available on our usual rehearsal days.

We together,
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Gallileo
band,
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organise
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many
public
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events
to raise a fund for our
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community
development and
also
to donate
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some
money for free education to the middle
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class
students that we have recently introduced. I would like to bring to your note that, our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community’s
name and benefits that we offer to the poor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are established
through our musician trope wherever we host our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
.
Therefore
, our
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community
is getting recognized not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
locally
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but
also
throughout the nation.
Consequently
, we receive more donations from various
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people
. We are fine to adjust our
Possible spelling mistake. 'practising' is British English.
practising
time
instead
of Tuesday and Friday evenings, we can push forward to Wednesday and Saturday Mornings.

I look forward to hearing your usual support.

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Your
sincerely
,

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Sayu
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5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall You have been told however that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall Write a letter to the manager In the letter describe what v. 2

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  American English
6 paragraphs
179 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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