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Infrastructure in your classroom is not good for studying. Write your classroom manager as the monitor to complain about the issue and request a transfer to a high quality room. v.2

Infrastructure in your classroom is not good for studying. Write your classroom manager as the monitor to complain about the issue and request a transfer to a high quality room. v. 2
Dear Madam, I am a monitor of a language class who are learning in Room C20 where the conditions are unfavorable. Hence, I am writing you to not only present some problems what we are coping with but also require you to solve these issues as soon as possible. The first issue is that the room is pretty dark since some lights do not work; therefore, it is quite difficult for us to note content of lessons. In addition, the noise from the near-by crowded road makes us get difficult to practice listening skill. Lastly, number of tables is insufficient for a thirty- student class, so we always feel uncomfortable when studying in such a narrow space. With above problems of my classroom, I hope to be allowed to switch into a better quality one; otherwise, our studying results can be affected seriously. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Harry
Dear Madam,

I am a monitor of a language
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class
who are learning in Room C20 where the conditions are unfavorable.
Hence
, I am writing you to not
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only
present
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some
problems what we are coping with
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but
also
require you to solve these issues as
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soon
as possible.

The
first
issue is that the room is pretty dark since
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some
lights do not work;
therefore
, it is quite difficult for us to note content of lessons.
In addition
, the noise from the near-by crowded road
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makes
us
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get
difficult to practice listening
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skill
.
Lastly
, number of tables is insufficient for a thirty- student
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class
,
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so
we always feel uncomfortable when studying in such a narrow space.

With above problems of my classroom, I hope to be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to switch into a better quality one;
otherwise
, our studying results can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
seriously
. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Harry
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS letter Infrastructure in your classroom is not good for studying. Write your classroom manager as the monitor to complain about the issue and request a transfer to a high quality room. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
153 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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