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You have a Facebook friend living and he/she is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter, describe a news story in your countryexplain why people are interested in itsay how the story p v.2

You have a Facebook friend living and he/she is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter, describe a news story in your countryexplain why people are interested in itsay how the story p v. 2
Dear James, I hope you will find this letter in radiant health and I am writing this letter to explain you a prominent news story of my nation. I want to share a recent incident in which 42 soldiers were martyred by a suicide bomber in Kashmir. However, it was an egregious situation for all the citizens of India. Soldiers were patrolling and suddenly, a terrorist came with a car full of explosive and blasted it. It was a shocking news for every citizen of India because it is the issue of national security. In addition to that, people also want to take revenge with the responsible terrorists who have committed a heinous crime. People are protesting against the government and compelling it to take some profound steps. This incident affected me a lot because being an Indian, I would not tolerate the anti-humanity act. Moreover, one of my friend' s father was also killed in this attack who was a major in Indian army. So, I am very sad due to this wicked act. I hope, it will help you in your assignment and give my regards to uncle and aunt. Best regards, Mohit
Dear James,

I hope you will find this letter in radiant
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
health and
I am writing this letter to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
you a prominent news story of my nation.

I want to share a recent incident in which 42 soldiers
were martyred
by a suicide bomber in Kashmir.
However
, it was an egregious situation for all the citizens of India. Soldiers were patrolling and
suddenly
, a terrorist came with a car full of explosive and blasted it.

It was
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "shocking news".
a shocking news
for every citizen of India
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it is the issue of national security.
In addition
to that,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
also
want to take revenge with the responsible terrorists who have committed a heinous crime.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
are protesting against the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and compelling it to take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
profound steps.

This incident
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
me a lot
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
being an Indian, I would not tolerate the anti-humanity act.
Moreover
, one of my
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friend&
#039; s father was
also
killed in this attack who was a major in Indian army.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
sad due to this wicked act.

I hope, it will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you in your assignment and give my regards to uncle and aunt.

Best regards,

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Mohit
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have a Facebook friend living and he/she is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter, describe a news story in your countryexplain why people are interested in itsay how the story p v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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