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you plan to apply for a course at a language school in London. Write a letter to the school administration. 1) Explain why you want to take a language course2)Give information about yourself3) ask for information about fees and accommodation. v.2

you plan to apply for a course at a language school in London. Write a letter to the school administration. 1) Explain why you want to take a language course2)Give information about yourself3) ask for information about fees and accommodation. v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to enquire about an intensive English crash course at your language school. I would like to enroll for the course in order to prepare for the IELTS test which I plan to take on next month. I am a hard-working student living in India, and I would like to proficient in English. I have already attained an upper-intermediate level of English but would like to get an advanced level of English in speaking and reading. In fact, I would like to maximize the level of my English because I am going to apply for vocational training abroad; therefore, I need to get high band score in the IELTS to receive this training. Would you mind informing me about the fees structure of this course? I would also like to know if you give accommodation for language learners from abroad. Thank you for your time and help. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Best Regards, Atul Dixit
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to
Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.
enquire
about an intensive English crash course at your language school. I would like to enroll for the course in order to prepare for the IELTS
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
which I plan to take on
next
month.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
-working student living in India, and I would like to proficient in English.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have already attained an upper-intermediate level of English
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
an advanced level of English in speaking and reading.

In fact, I would like to maximize the level of my English
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I am going to apply for vocational training abroad;
therefore
, I need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
high band score in the IELTS to receive this training.

Would you mind informing me about the fees structure of this course? I would
also
like to know if you give accommodation for language learners from abroad.

Thank you for your time and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Best Regards,

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Atul
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Dixit
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter you plan to apply for a course at a language school in London. Write a letter to the school administration. 1) Explain why you want to take a language course2)Give information about yourself3) ask for information about fees and accommodation. v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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