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Write to a friend about your new job. 1) explain why you decided to look for a new job. 2) Describe how you looked for a new job. 3) Describe your new job. v.2

Write to a friend about your new job. 1) explain why you decided to look for a new job. 2) Describe how you looked for a new job. 3) Describe your new job. v. 2
​Hi Leena, How are you? Hope you are doing well. Do you remember? Last week, you were asking about my new job that I recently got in an MNC. I discussed with you two months back that I was not satisfied with my earlier HR job. Neither it was offering me new career opportunities to grow in my role nor was paying me well off as per the market standards. Therefore, I decided to change it. Cracking a job in an MNC was not a cakewalk; however, I managed to get it through my sheer hard work and references. Not only I uploaded my CV on various job portals but also personally contacted different HR heads through LinkedIn to get a spotlight on my résumé. After giving various attempts, I can click this job. Now, I am working as a Senior Manager in an Accenture company. Here, I will handle three regions, including South, North & West, and I will be responsible for developing training and compensation programs for new joiners. Just let me know If you need any details about it. I would be glad to address it. Take care and see you soon. Anika
​Hi
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Leena
,

How are you? Hope you are doing well.

Do you remember? Last week, you were asking about my new
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job
that I recently
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got
in an
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MNC
. I discussed with you two months back that I was not satisfied with my earlier HR
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job
. Neither it was offering me new career opportunities to grow in my role nor was paying me well off as per the market standards.
Therefore
, I decided to
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change
it. Cracking a
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job
in an
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MNC
was not a cakewalk;
however
, I managed to
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get
it through my sheer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work and references. Not
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only
I uploaded my CV on various
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job
portals
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but
also
personally
contacted
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different
HR heads through LinkedIn to
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get
a spotlight on my résumé.

After giving various attempts, I can click this
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job
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
, I am working as a Senior Manager in an Accenture
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company
. Here, I will handle three regions, including South, North
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&amp
; West, and I will be responsible for developing training and compensation programs for new joiners.

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Just
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let
me know If you need any
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details
about it. I would be glad to address it.

Take care and
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see
you
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soon
.

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Anika
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5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter Write to a friend about your new job. 1) explain why you decided to look for a new job. 2) Describe how you looked for a new job. 3) Describe your new job. v. 2

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  American English
7 paragraphs
195 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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