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Your pen friend lives in an English-speaking country. You want to visit him and find a summer job. 1) describe the kind of job you would like to find2) Ask for information about the employment agencies you could apply to. 3) Ask for information about langua v.2

Your pen friend lives in an English-speaking country. You want to visit him and find a summer job. 1) describe the kind of job you would like to find2) Ask for information about the employment agencies you could apply to. 3) Ask for information about langua v. 2
Dear Leena, How are you? Sorry, It' s been a long time since I got in touch with you. As summer vacations are approaching; therefore, I am planning to visit your country next month. This time, I would like to opt for a full-time HR job there. Since I have done my masters in Human Resource management, I think it would be easy to fetch a role in the same domain. I am having six months of job experience too that I received through a college Summer internship. What' s your advice on it? To get my CV floated in multiple companies, I will be required employment agencies contact details. Could you please help me in understanding that list? Since you are a native citizen there, it will be easy for you to filter genuine companies. I know to get through Job in Germany, one has to be proficient enough in a native language. Therefore, I am wondering about taking a crash course in the same, until I get a job there. If you recommend a few institutes name, then it will be a great help of me. I am eagerly waiting for your suggestion! Take care and see you soon. Radha,
Dear
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Leena
,

How are you? Sorry,
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#039; s been a long time since I
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got
in touch with you. As summer vacations are approaching;
therefore
, I am planning to visit your country
next
month.

This time, I would like to opt for a full-time HR
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job
there. Since I have done my masters in Human Resource management, I
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think
it would be easy to fetch a role in the same domain. I am having six months of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
experience
Did you mean "to that"?
too that
I received through a college Summer internship.
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What&
#039; s your advice on it?

To
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get
my CV floated in multiple
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companies
, I will
be required
employment agencies contact
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details
. Could you
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please
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help
me in understanding that list? Since you are a native citizen there, it will be easy for you to filter genuine
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companies
.

I know to
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get
through
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Job
in Germany, one
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has to
be proficient
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enough
in a native language.
Therefore
, I am wondering about taking a crash course in the same, until I
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get
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
there. If you recommend a few institutes name, then it will be a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of me.

I am
eagerly
waiting for your suggestion!

Take care and
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see
you
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soon
.

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Radha
,
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter Your pen friend lives in an English-speaking country. You want to visit him and find a summer job. 1) describe the kind of job you would like to find2) Ask for information about the employment agencies you could apply to. 3) Ask for information about langua v. 2

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  American English
8 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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