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ou are studying a short course in another country Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider There is a major problem with the accommodation Write a letter to the course provider In your letter Say what the problem is Describe the accommodatio v.2

ou are studying a short course in another country Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider There is a major problem with the accommodation Write a letter to the course provider In your letter Say what the problem is Describe the accommodatio v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my disappointment for the accommodation provided to me in Canada. As you are aware that I am pursuing a 3 months Human Resource course in Toronto and I am residing at the accommodation provided by you. Unfortunately, the place is not upto my expectations. It has a filthy neighbourhood. Also the flat is not fully furnished. Since, I am a vegetarian. I had requested for a fully-furnished flat with a refrigerator. As I can store my food in it. I was expecting a studio apartment with a good surrounding. Also, I had requested for an accommodation which will be close to college. Could you please look into the matter and resolve it as soon as possible. I will be grateful to you, if you can provide me a better living space near to the campus. Looking forward to your prompt response. Yours faithfully, Jessica Ayri
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my disappointment for the accommodation provided to me in Canada.

As you are aware that I am pursuing a 3 months Human Resource course in Toronto and I am residing at the accommodation provided by you. Unfortunately, the place is not
Possible spelling mistake found.
upto
my expectations. It has a filthy
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbourhood' is British English.
neighbourhood
.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Also
the flat is not
fully
furnished.

“Since” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Since
, I am a vegetarian. I had requested for a
fully
-furnished flat with a refrigerator.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
I can store my food in it. I was expecting a studio apartment with a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
surrounding.
Also
, I had requested for an accommodation which will be close to college.

Could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
look into the matter and resolve it as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. I will be grateful to you, if you can provide me a better living space near to the campus.

Looking forward to your prompt response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jessica
Possible spelling mistake found.
Ayri
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter ou are studying a short course in another country Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider There is a major problem with the accommodation Write a letter to the course provider In your letter Say what the problem is Describe the accommodatio v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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