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You are an employee in an office, working on one big project together with your colleagues. Write a letter to your manager to inform him/her that some of the employees make mistakes that affect your work. In your letter say- What mistakes have you encount v.1

You are an employee in an office, working on one big project together with your colleagues. Write a letter to your manager to inform him/her that some of the employees make mistakes that affect your work. In your letter say- What mistakes have you encount v. 1
Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to bring your attention to some issue which we have in relation to our new project. I am a senior developer, working on Sales software in your organization and I am in charge of other programmers as well. We have recently released the beta version of our new software which tested by unit test department last month. Although all of the errors were solved, a deluge of complaints about this new version was sent. Our Initials review is shown that our colleagues in unit test department did not test the major part of the software that causes all those complaints. I noticed it seems that was not their first time and other teams have faced with the same problem as well. They told me, to tackle this problem, firstly they spoke with someone who was in charge on that unit and secondly however they try to contact you and share their problem, they did not succeed and their problem still exists. I think the best solution to solve this matter as soon as possible would a disciplinary meeting with staff and try to stop this malpractice as soon as possible. I would be happy to meet you in person and provide any further explanations on this issue if needed.
Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to bring your attention to
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some
issue which we have in relation to our new project.

I am a senior developer, working on Sales software in your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
organization and
I am in charge of other programmers
as well
. We have recently released the beta version of our new software which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tested
by unit
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
department last month. Although
Consider using "all the".
all of the
errors
were solved
, a deluge of complaints about this new version was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
. Our Initials review
is shown
that our colleagues in unit
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
department did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
the major part of the software that causes all those complaints.

I noticed it seems that was not their
first
time and other teams have faced with the same
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problem
as well
. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
me, to tackle this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
,
firstly
they spoke with someone who was in charge on that unit and
secondly
however
they try to contact you and share their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
, they did not succeed and their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
still
exists.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
the best solution to solve this matter as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible would a disciplinary meeting with staff and try to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
this malpractice as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible. I would be happy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you in person and provide any
further
explanations on this issue if needed.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are an employee in an office, working on one big project together with your colleagues. Write a letter to your manager to inform him/her that some of the employees make mistakes that affect your work. In your letter say- What mistakes have you encount v. 1

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
215 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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