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05. 11. 2017You ordered an item on a company website, which should have been delivered the next day, but it never turned up. Write a letter to the manager and say– what was the item– why it was important that you get it immediately– what you suggest t v.2

05. 11. 2017You ordered an item on a company website, which should have been delivered the next day, but it never turned up. Write a letter to the manager and say– what was the item– why it was important that you get it immediately– what you suggest t v. 2
Dear Sir or Madame, I am writing to complain about your poor service. On 1st November 2017, I purchased on your website a novel workstation Lenovo W550s with an additional battery and a doc-station. Moreover, I paid four hundred dollars for installation of all needed software on the computer. In overall, three thousand two hundred and twenty-five dollars has been transferred to your company but my laptop has not arrived yet. While the signed contract states, the delivery was scheduled on 2nd November. The purchased laptop is so important to me because my previous one is out of order and fulfilling my job duties is impossible without using a workstation. In addition, on 5th November, I should present my project to the head of my department and partners of our firm; the absence of a portable computer means the assignment will not be finished in time. In other words, I am doomed. I see two possible solutions to the existing issue. You may refund my money on a credit card and I will buy the item in a store that belongs to your rival or you can make a miracle and deliver me the expected item tomorrow morning. I am waiting for your prompt response. Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk
Dear Sir or Madame,

I am writing to complain about your poor service. On 1st November 2017, I
purchased
on your website a novel workstation Lenovo W550s with an additional battery and a doc-station.
Moreover
, I paid four hundred dollars for installation of all needed software on the computer. In
overall
, three thousand two hundred and twenty-five dollars has
been transferred
to your
company
but
my laptop has not arrived
yet
. While the signed contract states, the delivery
was scheduled
on 2nd November.

The
purchased
laptop is
so
important
to me
because
my previous one is out of order and fulfilling my job duties is impossible without using a workstation.
In addition
, on 5th November, I should present my project to the head of my department and partners of our firm; the absence of a portable computer means the assignment will not
be finished
in time.
In other words
, I
am doomed
.

I
see
two possible solutions to the existing issue. You may refund my money on a credit card and I will
buy
the item in a store that belongs to your rival or you can
make
a miracle and deliver me the
expected
item tomorrow morning.

I am waiting for your prompt response.

Sincerely
yours,

Eugene
Dubinchuk
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter 05. 11. 2017You ordered an item on a company website, which should have been delivered the next day, but it never turned up. Write a letter to the manager and say– what was the item– why it was important that you get it immediately– what you suggest t v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
208 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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