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You need to do more physical exercise Write a letter to your friend asking him to join you In your letter you should tell why you want to do physical exercise what type of physical exercise you are planning to do why you want your friend to join you v.2

You need to do more physical exercise Write a letter to your friend asking him to join you In your letter you should tell why you want to do physical exercise what type of physical exercise you are planning to do why you want your friend to join you v. 2
Dear Chris, I hope this letter finds you in radiant health and best of spirits. I am writing this letter to ask you to accompany me for the regular workout. I have put on some extra kilos due to my sitting job. At the same time, my physician has highly recommended me to start indulging in physical activities regularly to keep myself disease free. Therefore, I have made my mind to include a strenuous workout in my daily health regime to beat obesity. Well, I am planning to join a fitness centre situated in the vicinity of my house, which is also close to yours. In fact, it offers an interesting schedule of a complete week including cardio, weight-lifting, Zumba, meditation and yoga - basic and advanced. Enclosed is the brochure so that you can have a quick look. I would really appreciate If you can join me. It will benefit both of us in our physical well-being and living a healthy lifestyle. I really enjoy your company and feel that your continuous boosting would keep me motivated and enthusiastic. I am anticipating a positive response from you. Best wishes, Ell Green
Dear Chris,

I hope this letter finds you in radiant health and best of spirits. I am writing this letter to ask you to accompany me for the regular workout.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have put on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extra kilos due to my sitting job. At the same time, my physician has
highly
recommended me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
indulging in physical activities
regularly
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
myself disease free.
Therefore
, I have made my mind to include a strenuous workout in my daily health regime to beat obesity.

Well, I am planning to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
a fitness
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
situated in the vicinity of my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
, which is
also
close to yours. In fact, it offers an interesting schedule of a complete week including cardio, weight-lifting, Zumba, meditation and yoga
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
-
basic and advanced. Enclosed is the brochure
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that you can have a quick look.

I would
really
appreciate If you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
me. It will benefit both of us in our physical well-being and living a healthy lifestyle. I
really
enjoy your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and feel that your continuous boosting would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
me motivated and enthusiastic.

I am anticipating a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
response from you.

Best wishes,

Ell Green
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You need to do more physical exercise Write a letter to your friend asking him to join you In your letter you should tell why you want to do physical exercise what type of physical exercise you are planning to do why you want your friend to join you v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
191 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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